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PHO Interludes and Worm Fanfic - Dartz - 11-13-2016
One of the odder things that come out of worm fanfic is the tendancy for every bloody story to delve into the local online message boards. It's just sort of one of the automatic cliches for wormfic. With the same usernames and Void Cowboy being a hated idiot. The result is often a self-demonstration of why some darling's should be skewered with the end of a rusty blade and left to bleed on the floor.
Sometimes, they should be set aside. I remain unsure whether it was a useful exercise or not, but it took far more effort than expected. Tone. Texture. Ripping off usernames.
Also, apologies to Bob. I couldn't resist. The names were filled in after the text.... and it fit. I assume the original was probably taken by someone.....
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?The state of play in Brockton Bay Pt 3
In: Boards ? Places ? America ? Brockton Bay
(Showing Page 301 of 301)
?Lib1rn (Original Poster)
Posted on September 13th, 2010:
Since the Previous thread's topped 500.
Keeping everyone in the know. People's lives might depend on what you post. So keep that in mind before you hit send.
? Herriot
Replied on April 14, 2011:
Okay. You see This thread here. Now, that’s an Emipre Safehouse in the Richmond getting hit by Glory Girl and some n00b.
Up until a week ago the Richmond was solid ABB.
This whole Lung getting captured thing has really upset the apple cart we all knew. Three days ago two [slurs] knocked in asking for their monthly protection.
This morning two peckerwoods knock on the door and tell me I’m part of the Empire now and they want their pound of flesh before the end of the week, to get on the right side before the Day of the Rope comes to Brockton.
This is fucking ridiculous.
(User Warned for this post. Comment by Judge: Really? I get the frustration, but keep it civil)
? General Antagonist
Replied on April 14, 2011:
Not sure which is worse.
Not sure if the ABB aren’t going to come out like a cornered rat.
? Binkadocious
Replied on April 14, 2011:
With what?
2 capes. One that just sorta appears to follow orders and one whos sole claim to fame is a bomb threat in Princeton. Face it, without Lung, they’re really nobody.
What does the Empire have? Empire’ll win.
? BayFresk
Replied on April 14, 2011:
Wait and see.
Something funny’s been happening with my Japanese neighbours.
? Binkadocious
Replied on April 14, 2011:
Like What?
? BayFresk
Replied on April 14, 2011:
A week ago, you could set your watch by them. .
Then they go missing. Come back at strange hours in the day sort of thing. Like, they were missing all last night but their teenage kid was home, and then there’s a lot of shit happened late last night. Lots of weird noises
Anybody else have neighbours?
? Binkadocious
Replied on April 14, 2011:
Y’see. There’s your problem. They got teenagers. And you know what teenagers do when their parents are away
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?One year on
In: Boards ? Places ? Europe ? Ireland ? After Hours
?MegaGurrier (Ar Bhain na Muice)(Moderatoir)
Posted on February 10th, 2014:
So. It’s been a year since that day.
How’s everyone doing?
Same rules apply.
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? Stocious_One (Sued by Denis O’Brien)
Replied on March 14, 2011:
The Hairy Lemon’s back in action. For better or worse. Fucker got me dog. Things are getting back to normal. A sort of clean and shiny normal.
Still. No Bang Bang. Bus journeys through the city just aren’t the same without yer man shooting them.
?Dad_Zebra(Still Alive….)
Replied on March 14, 2011:
The character of the city’s been gutted, drowned under the muck and filth. All that’s replacing it is thick steel and sheer glass just like every other city the world over.
Sure it’s ‘Dublin’
But it’s not mine.
I don’t recognise this place at all anymore. It could be any European city built out of my town
? Small_Far_Away(On Craggy Island)
Replied on March 14, 2011:
Well, what the fuck do you expect? The whole fucking thing’s beneath a couple of hundred yards of muck
What were we supposed to do?
Dig it all up?
Plough it to green fields and let Cork be the bloody capital?
Build some twee American-style image of what the city used to be? A carbon copy in fake red-brick?
Get some cop on why don’t you?
It’ll never be the town we grew up in. So what? The town we grew up in was destroyed. The rest of the world can put up with it, why can’t we? Why do the Irish always have to put on the poor mouth?
? Muir Eireannach(Cold. Grey)
Replied on March 14, 2011:
Not this again….
I’ve had enough of this bollocks.
? TweeTwee(Brewmaster)
Replied on March 14, 2011:
I miss Ryans pub. I’m tearing up just thinking about it. When you step outide and the smell of roast barley from the brewery across the river. We’d drop in for a pint coming off shift with the rest of the team and it’d just be hopping.
All the great boozers are gone.
? Fonzi (Blast it with Piss)
Replied on March 14, 2011:
Mulligans is still open
? TweeTwee(Brewmaster)
Replied on March 14, 2011:
There is no Temple Bar anymore, how is there a Mulligans?
? Fonzi (Blast it with Piss)
Replied on March 14, 2011:
Up in Stoneybatter. The last true pub in Dublin.
?RyanCian (Indicators Optional)
Replied on March 14, 2011:
The Brazen Head just opened up again. Looks well done on the inside too. Not too modern, not to overdone and the pint’s right.
? Dad_Zebra (Still Alive…. )
Replied on March 14, 2011:
It’s not the original. We played an Ars Magica game in the old one once. All the PC’s met up in the exact same pub, 800 years ago. At the same table.
You can’t do that now.
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?So, Everybody’s seen *that* video
In: Boards ? Places ? America ? Brockton Bay ? Capes
Needtocomeupwithaname (Gargoyle) (Original Poster)
Posted on April 14, 2011:
Link here if you didn’t.
Since I need to do more.
Brockton Bay’s newest entry onto the cape scene took the unusual step of sending a recording back to home base, in case he got into trouble while testing some new gear. He hurt his leg somehow, and we join him making his way through the Richmond trying to get home.
In summary.
*Glory Girl mistakes him for a Nazi. He dodges her attack. Panty shot.
*They team up.
*Cleavage shot of Glory Girl
*Panacea makes an appearance and defuckulates his leg.
*We move through the streets of Brockton Bay Docklands riding some sort of wire-swing contraption.
*We arrive at an Empire 88 holdout.
*Info-chan is the voice on the other end of the line.
*Cleavage shot of Glory Girl.
*We swing over to the roof to be challenged by a sentry
*Speak 14 words to enter.
*Sneak in and around, gathering intelligence.
*Violence happens.
*Cleavage shot of Glory Girl.
*Skinhead who put a woman in hospital gets put in hospital.
*Stream cuts somewhat abruptly, like whatever it ran off ran out of data.
Now. What does this tell us about our new wannabee?
Name seems to be Jaeger.
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? Dendromedary
Replied on April 14, 2011:
Tinker 2./ Mover 4. If he got good at that he’d be moving fast, and keeping high.
No. Wait. Maybe Thinker Power too.
How’d he know the password?
? Bernstein Beer
Replied on April 14, 2011:
That’s like being amazed at having your account hacked when yours password is Password1
Any schmuck can pick up the correct shibboleths if you live in certain parts of this city, whether you want to or not. Or does anyone honestly think they haven’t heard the promises that the Day of the Rope is a coming. Especially in the last week.
I’ve never known Nazi’s for creativity.
? Brackish_Water
Replied on April 14, 2011:
Creativity.
Like using ‘Birth of a Hero’ as a soundtrack.
Again.
There is more out there than Two Steps from Hell.
? DerricotPie
Replied on April 14, 2011:
Cliches work
Kinda fits the swing.
I hafta ask though. Who, or what is Info-chan?
? Kyoki no Ongaku
Replied on April 14, 2011:
Probably whoever was making the recording. Home base support on speed-dial. Gotta love it. It’s the most useful talent ever.
It means we’re not dealing a complete moron. Sure he’s alone, in a dark part of town with untried gear in an unkind world, but he’s at least got someone watching his ass to call 9-1-1 if he gets in trouble.
And that someone’s smart enough to grab building plans on a minute’s notice, and probably relaying what’s she watching on screen to Miss Prom Queen on the roof, since he’s busy doing the whole heiling and marching and marching and heiling thing down below. (And creepily well for a non-Nazi…)
Smart enough not to go charging in without scoping the place out first. Dumb enough to think going in there pretending to be a Nazi is a good idea. Lucky enough to pull it off.
Kid’s got potential.
Especially if you take the little lie of just being out to test some gear at face value.
? Glory Girl (Verified Cape)
Replied on April 14, 2011:
Yeah. We met the guy. If you saw his costume he looked totally like a Nazi cape, especially from high up. I thought he knew too much about the Empire, so maybe he might be related to one, but maybe not. I think he hates them.
Sweet. Bit weird. Couldn’t keep his eyes off me. Good fighter. Sounded Sorta like a Southie but weirder.
And the worst imitation of a New Hampshire accent I’ve ever heard.
? Lehane (Faithless)
Replied on April 14, 2011:
Not Southie. Definitely not one of us.
Sounds more like Australian to me. You don’t hear that too often. Maybe someone who got stranded, or got out before they set up the checkpoints?
Small wonder he’s keepin a low profile then. INS will be up his ass to make sure he’s not one of hers pretty damn sharpish.
Also, he who fight’s monsters and all that. Jaeger might be a reference to this.
? Morgenstern (Know your enemy…)
Replied on April 14, 2011:
Jaeger was taken as a cape-name. Changed his name to Stormfront after shacking up with Fuhrerprinzip in LA because they had that dispute with MacDonald and the NAA. Been free since.
Why do I feel dirty for knowing that?
I vote it sticks.
Just look at the way he swoops down on that guy. Both blades touch and he drops.
ZZaaaapp! Thud.
It’s just so right.
? XxVoid_CowboyxX
Replied on April 14, 2011:
Hah! Jokes on you. I set mine to Password 2. They’ll never guess that.
He’s already been doing this for a long time. You think somebody using a sort of swing catapult like that has had a lot of practice or training to avoid going splat.
? Meeksa
Replied on April 14, 2011:
KNO…. Lie? Kinda makes sense.
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? Dendromedary
Replied on April 14, 2011:
I don’t think anybody believes that. Maybe he does. But you know what they’re like….
Why the full costume if it was a gear test? That’s a lot of gear.
This has been planned for a long time. This isn’t just some spur of the moment thing thrown together by a kid in a bedroom in one night.
Cowboy's right. He's had practice.
? Hardron Prime
Replied on April 14, 2011:
“Swing Catapult”. I like that.
Another vote for Jaeger. Especially since the last guy spelt it with the two dots. And sucked.
? Kyoki no Ongaku
Replied on April 14, 2011:
He’s not smooth enough to be practiced.
But definitely assisted.
And definitely lying about why he was out there.
The more I think about it, the more I have my suspicions. Too many kids like this meet bad ends.
? Tiron Heel
Replied on April 14, 2011:
[CONTENT REMOVED]
Judge: Okay yeah, there’s calling for restraint which is okay even against Nazi’s because hey, they’re human beings too. And then there’s the whole Turner Diaries tangeant. Enjoy the break.
? DellGriffen
Replied on April 14, 2011:
I see what you mean.
It’s like each jump with the swing catapult is his first one and he’s just sort of barely making it each time.
I think some sort of secondary power. Something kinaesthetic. Like Circus? It lets him succeed in gymnastics.
And be Shadow Stalker’s boyfriend. Swooping down from the darkness to strike down the evildoors
Also. Reported.
? Hardron Prime
Replied on April 14, 2011:
Who will save us from Zombie Hendrix and the Evil Doors?
? Lambsbridge_Runaway
Replied on April 14, 2011:
Official release to law enforcement services from the office of the local PRT and straight into the wiki:
Codename: Jaeger (Prev. Chariot).
Age: 13-17 estimated
Sex: Male
Provisional evaluation is:
Tinker 3. (Mover 3).
Thinker 2. (Precog)
Tinker specialisation appears to be electrical equipment, as evidenced by the design of the harness. Not enough information to speculate further. Classification to be amended pending acquisition of a sample, or further encounter
Costume confirmed to include some form of integrated cellular communications device, with camera, recording and text capability. Ostensibly to allow a remote individual to call for assistance if in trouble.
Equipment shows a tendency towards being light and flexible.
Known allies: “Info-Chan”.
Combat style: Fast. Hit and Run.
Known to carry a pair of blunt ‘blades’ that are electrically charged and can induce severe stuns in an unprotected human, equivalent at least to a high energy Taser shot. Possible risk of severe injury to individuals with pre-existing or latent heart conditions as a result. Blade pommels appear to contain some form of lightweight momentary stun.
The PRT would like to speak to Jaeger on non-criminal matters.
Jaeger is not currently a suspect in any active investigation.
Jaeger is not assumed to be a direct threat to the public. Normal precautionary procedures to be followed until otherwise indicated.
Codename: “Info-Chan”
Age: Unknown.
Sex: Female:
Provisional Evaluation is:
Tinker 0
Possible parahuman power. Classification to be amended pending further encounters.
Specialisation may be computers and technology.
Known Allies: “Jaeger”
Combat-Style: Unknown.
Noted for Information Technology.
Codename suggest possible east-asian cultural base.
Info-Chan is not currently a suspect in any active investigation.
Info-Chan is not assumed to be a direct threat to the public. Normal precautionary procedures to be followed until otherwise indicated.
? Hardron Prime
Replied on April 14, 2011:
“Prev. Chariot”
So, already known to the PRT as a parahuman, but this is the first time putting on the Cape and being spotted in public.
Chariot’s probably a better name, IMHO.Can I change my vote? No Nazi connotoations for a start.
? TheFakeKidWin (Verified Cape)
Replied on April 14, 2011:
Dude, I know you’re reading this. I did too when it was me. Feels cool, right? Everyone talking about you, calling what you did awesome. Being their hero....
The Protectorate just want to talk. Honest. Discuss options, none of which mean you have to sign up.
Drop me a PM, even with a throwaway.
? Meeksa
Replied on April 14, 2011:
Like clockwork.
‘We are the WENE’s. . Your biological and technological distinctiveness will be added to our own. Your Powers will adapt to service us. You will be Assimilated. Resistance is Futile.
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- Norgarth - 11-14-2016
Quote:Tinker specialisation appears to either be electrical equipment, as evidenced by the design of the harness.Shouldn't there be an 'or' in that sentence? alternatively, remove the 'either'.
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"I've always wanted to be somebody, but I should have been more specific." - George Carlin
- deadpan29 - 11-14-2016
1) It's probably an issue of different code on different boards, but some of your indent tags show up as text rather than forcing indents.
2) For help with the tricky formatting, there exist both downloadable and browser-based tools for generating these.
http://forums.spacebattles.com/threads ... rm.319603/
http://ujamer.github.io/myrddin/
3) I'm not sure what else to say because I'm not sure what you were trying to achieve with this, given your stated disdain for these interludes.
4) My thought on PHO segments in general:
4a) They work as a tool to explore how ordinary people see and are affected by the super-powered action and events. This is something I like to see explored in stories, and not just Worm stories.
4b) If you look at the original source material, they also tend to work better when there are things between the different thread segments, such as private chat conversations or the thoughts, reactions, or unrelated actions of the person reading the threads.
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No, I don't believe the world has gone mad. In order for it to go mad it would need to have been sane at some point.
- Dartz - 11-14-2016
I had a lot of things in mind, beyond trying to have them....
First one is setting up Bakuda's station of the canon, while also taking a look at what the general state of things is. The Empire's bullish. And also a joke from a neighbour who's overheard the activities in the third segment and drawn the wrong. conclusions. Lib1rn is supposedly Lisa Wilbourn, gathering information. (Too many people use The All Seeing Eye, it's a bloody cliche). It's setting up the sense that something is about to come to a head (And not necessarily the canon something either)
Second part, I might've overthought. Someone's looking at the closest thing to home. It's a thread that's been looked at (Hence the page 22), but then ignored for a long time. There's supposed to be some sort a sense of alienation and seperation from it. Even if it is a little amusing. (Also, The Hairy Lemon and Bang Bang really did exist - it's a long story). Maybe thinking about 'home'. Some of these are somewhat 'Irish' memes. An American audience isn't supposed to get them....
The third part is ringing bells for more than a few things:
Actually reveal what the video might've been like and give it a soundtrack. And add some self-deprecation.
Bernstein Beer is to show that the city has a Jewish community that's getting hassled (I think.... Yiddish idioms != my thing and i didn't want to overdo it)
Dendromedary's comment about this not being put together in one night is telling - both because it sort of was, and wasn't at the same time.
Posting the video has revealed a lot about his power. Enough for people to make guesses....
....That may still be wrong. Hence Void Cowboy makes a reasonably insightful point, he's wrong, but not stupid. It's a logical enough conclusion. (Contrary to his usual fandom portrayal)
KNO's postings, and the comment about Fighting Monsters are meant to foreshadow something upcoming. See the Nazi's being bullish up above for further hints.
Tiron Heel indicates that Kaiser is, on some level, being made aware of Jaeger. The link being the phrase 'Day of the Rope', and the reference to The Turner Diaries. (I feel so dirty). The phrase will appear again. It's supposed to be a touchstone.
In related news, Lehane's specific comment about the Jaeger/Hunter comparison is also supposed to be just a little telling in light of the above. Something about hate.
It's also finally the only way I could think of to reveal that the Protectorate already knew about the kid - they gave him a codename, which (while also being both an in-joke, is another slice of foreshadowing for the future, considering the original 'Chariot') indicates they know a lot more than he thinks. Which is an important hint that other people have plans first person perspective cannot know.
The Protectorate, on some level, even individually, are trying to reach out rather than be an omnipresent bullying authority.
And I've probably overwrought the whole bloody thing, but so it goes.
Even the title is a reference to the Victorian trope of random white guy showing up knowing better than the savage natives and leading them to salvation from their wicked and uncivilised ways....... like so many other SI fics.
Nobody'll ever notice or make the links. Like decrypting the voyager record.
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- Bob Schroeck - 11-15-2016
You know, one of these days I have to read Worm. But I have so much other stuff in my queue...
-- Bob
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Then the horns kicked in...
...and my shoes began to squeak.
- Dartz - 11-15-2016
Give it a month..... literally.
If you're lucky. It's a monster. Altough it does lose a little as it gets further on
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- M Fnord - 11-15-2016
Bob Schroeck Wrote:You know, one of these days I have to read Worm. But I have so much other stuff in my queue...As somebody who still has a considerable amount of Worm fanfic on his pull list... I'd honestly say it's only sort of worth it. The original work takes a lot of Dark Age of Comics surface detail but I was never really convinced that Wildbow understood what made the big Dark Age writers good. It's probably worth reading the first couple chapters just to see what all the yelling's about, then skip ahead & see if it actually holds your interest.
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- Matrix Dragon - 11-15-2016
It's got some impressive world building, and I like a number of the characters... but I've never been able to get very far into it. It's one of those settings where I prefer a number of fanfics to the source material. Wildbow and I have too much of a different worldview, or maybe just taste in fiction, I suppose.
- Dartz - 11-16-2016
It's detailed. It's the sort of story that asks the next question, then offers an answer that builds the world, then builds it, then builds it to a crescendo. Why people are heroes, why people are villains, why the whole villains and vigilantes thing can be such a game sometimes. The first few chapters aren't really representative, but then again, sort of are. It's hard to explain. There're some decisions later on that I don't necessariy agree with, but, well, It's hard to talk about without being spoilery.
On the one hand, Taylor's one of the few teenager's who behaves like an absolute fucking teenager. On the other, goddamn is she cold-blooded.
You manage to feel sympathetic for her and root for her, because it's her viewpoint you see.
Then you get the holy crap, thats why hints slithered throughout the narrative.
It's not so much dark, as just, it's less of a comic-book story. Decisions have real world-changing consequences at times rather than being vanished in the next retcon. Also, clever uses of 'weak' powers win against dumb uses of 'strong' powers. To the point that there really are no 'weak' powers, just someone who hasn't figured out the right way to get the best out of their shit yet.
Which is, incidentally, why Spacebattles loves it. It lets them wank out all the possible uses....
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