Mass Effect: Circular
04-27-2012, 07:07 AM
Hey all. Have a new project that I've been doing lately. I started a Mass Effect Peggy Sue, which more or less starts from the end of ME3 and goes back to the beginning of ME1. Which I have approached with my typical subtlety and tact.
Which is, none at all.
Which is right here.
I figured I might as well do a thread for comments, suggestions, critiquing and beta'ing, especially while SB is installing new forum software.
And post a teaser.
Quote: Noveria.
“Faster! Run faster!”
Holding the shotgun in both hands, she runs through the door,
hearing the stomping of metal boots close behind her. Flickering and
chittering sounds surround her, glowing eyes under the faceplate
seeing the hint of motion before they drop in front of her.
Chittering, hissing with acid fangs, they stand on eight outstretched
legs to pounce.
Screaming, she swings the shotgun and fires, blasting one, swinging
the barrel into another as it leaps, sending the crittery crawly
thing flying and splattering into a wall. She turns, running
backwards as the roaring thing rears up on four legs, swinging out
its toothed dagger things of tentacles, hissing at her as it chases
with several of its friends.
A hand grabs the back of her hood and pulls her in, dropping to the
cold metal floor as the cock of the shotgun is followed with a blast,
and the door closes in front of the headless thing which was once one
of the monsters of this doomed lab.
“Gotcha,” Kal'Reegar says, extending a hand, “You okay,
Ma'am?”
Tali takes his hand, letting him help her up. Which is when five
more of the crawly small things drop around them.
“Spiders! Spiders spiders spiders spiders!!!”
Each scream is punctuated by a blast from her shotgun, five
green puddles surrounding her. The two Quarians suck in breath,
leaning against each other.
“I hate spiders,” she says, “Especially evil homicidal
spiders.”
“Yeah,” Kal responds, “You and me both, Ma'am. Get the
elevator, I'll see if I can check in with Shepard.”
It's no secret that Tali'Zorah nar Rayya vas somethingsomething
hates elevators. It is no secret that she hates spiders.
So, the scream she lets off is to no one's surprise when the door
opens, and the elevator is revealed to be filled with Rachni.
But we're getting ahead of ourselves.
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Hooray! Less reason to go to Space Battles!
... what? I'm only there to read your stories. And Tavi's.
The story is well and truly breaking away from the original cycle already. I certainly didn't expect Sovereign to go down so fast.
It's also interesting that someone else remembers the events of the last cycle.
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How much knowledge of the games is required for this story?
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"Youngsters these days just have no appreciation for the magnificence of the legendary cucumber." --Krityan Elder, Tales of Vesperia.
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Good question.
-- Bob
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Then the horns kicked in...
...and my shoes began to squeak.
A good amount of knowledge helps. I try to explain as much as I can.
Quote: “We just killed a Reaper.”
Garrus' mandibles twitch as he says those words. Next to him,
Kaidan Alenko nods, rolling his neck.
“Hells yes.”
Next to Kaidan, Ash Williams sways back and forth on her heels, and
claps her hands together.
“Few more and we're done.”
The three stand outside the main airlock. Purple light from Widow
filters through the artificial atmosphere and UV screens surrounding
the dock, peaking through the arms of the Citadel. Not five minutes
after docking, a human admiral with a stick up his ass that would
make a turian proud appeared and demanded to make an inspection.
“What do you think?” Ash asks, “Think he'll snap at the Krogan
squatting in the shuttle bay, or the two dozen quarian marines doing
chinups in engineering?”
“I'm going to guess,” Kaidan says, tilting his head, “The
drell with the weird plastic surgery. And the other drell following
him around.”
Garrus twitches his mandibles.
“I'm guessing he'll ask where the Mako went off to.”
Kaidan shudders. Ash grins.
“Ten-hut!”
Kaidan and Ash straighten up. Following their cue, even though he
technically outranks them, Garrus does as well. Boots on metal, and
walking down the walkway comes someone in the uniform blues of an
alliance officer.
Red hair cut to above her shoulder, some gray in it. Green eyes,
crows feet faint and smile lines at the corners of her mouth. Her
face, otherwise, is the same as her daughter's. Strong, classy, an
almost ever present smirk pulling at the right side of her lips.
If David Anderson were made the first human Spectre, it was more or
less accepted that Hannah Shepard would be the captain of the ship
that would take him from world to world. The years have been kind to
her. As loose as her blues are, she doesn't have the paunch, doesn't
have sag a woman her age would be entitled to. This, at least, is
what Garrus muses. But he knows Chloe and Jane would kill him for
continuing this line of thought.
For different reasons.
“At ease,” she says, the three relaxing, “Alenko. Williams.
Where's the CO?”
“Rear Admiral Mikhailovich has requested an inspection tour of the
Normandy, Ma'am!” Ash responds, “Commander Shepard is escorting
him.”
Hannah nods, fixing the cap on her head.
“...quarians? What is a company of quarian marines doing onboard
the Normandy?”
The airlock opens. The unshaven, dress uniformed man locks eyes
with newest arrival. Rolling her eyes, Jane Shepard clicks her heels
and salutes her mother.
“Admiral,” Hannar says, saluting, “Sorry to interrupt. Orders
from brass. I need the Commander, now.”
Admiral Peter Mikhailovich salutes, and nods.
“Understood. As you were.”
And he walks off, muttering. Shoulders slumping, Jane shakes her
head, nodding to her officers and VIP, before turning back to Hannah.
And spotting the gold pips on her collar.
“Captain pips?”
“Farragut's being promoted upstairs,” Hannah responds, “I'm
now the CO of the SSV Kilimanjaro. And on order of Admiral Hackett
and Ambassador Udina, your ride until the Normandy's patched up.”
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Okay, definitely need to give this a second look....
The thing to remember is that the SSV Kilimanjaro, or the Big K as it's called by its crew, is a dreadnought. Which means it has advantages that the SSV Normandy does not have.
Primarily among those is the complete and utter lack of subtlety which comes from being a kilometer long. The mission statement of a ship like this is very different from that of a stealth frigate. In addition to having a full compliment of alliance marines, a fighter wing, and much heavier armor, the Kilimanjaro also has a main gun roughly the length of the Burj Khalifa, which accelerates a 20 kilogram tungsten slug to 1.3% the speed of light, which impacts with three times the force of the first atomic bomb.
And, there's also Hannah Shepard, aka Captain Hannah, who is the answer to the question "What sort of woman would have raised Commander Shepard?"
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*Reads GL's new fic on ff.net*
*Dissolves into hysterical screaming laughter. Multiple times.*
omg... omFg... Gregg... this one takes the cake.
Want MORE!!!
blackaeronaut Wrote:*Reads GL's new fic on ff.net*
*Dissolves into hysterical screaming laughter. Multiple times.*
omg... omFg... Gregg... this one takes the cake.
Want MORE!!! Sure.
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“So give it to me straight, Pressley. Did Joker actually
manage to break the damn ship?”
The bald man chuckles, shakes his head, and ducks under a loose
pipe, and continues walking through the hallway as he considers
Kaidan's question.
“No, Alenko. The term we use is structural compromise.
Joker's stunts structurally compromised the Normandy. Which
was never designed to, say-”
“Pull dime turns in an atmosphere, dodge an angry mechacthulhu
and run through a canyon that's barely big enough for a fighter.”
“So you saw the tapes?”
“Ash insisted. She brought popcorn.”
“So it's Ash?”
A choke on the other end. Muttering.
“ I hate you so much. So how long until the Normandy's
repaired?”
Walking down the neck of the Normandy's CiC, Pressley taps the green
circle and the door opens. At the pilot's seat, as always, is Jeff
Moreau.
“Adams said a week,” Pressley responded, “They need to take
out everything, flood the ship with omnigel to reinforce the
structure, and then put everything back in. That's at least how he
explained it to me, but it's not beyond the realm of possibility that
Bill's full of shit.”
“Yeah. And you're supervising?”
“Someone has to while Shepard does the galactic hero thing. And
look on the bright side, now you have two Shepards to stare
at.”
“ Hate. All my hate, Pressley.”
“Love you too. Pressley out.”
The link closes, and Pressley taps open his console and turns over
to Joker.
“C'mon baby,” Joker says, tapping the transparent screen, “You
know I'd never hurt you. What's the safeword?”
A red warning sign appears on the screen. Joker leans back in the
seat.
“That's my girl.”
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Chapter
5:
Breather
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This is Tali Zorah vas undecided nar Rayya. She is currently
confused. And perhaps a little flustered. She has also realized
that she may be most responsible for killing an ancient machine god
from beyond the galaxy, but that is something a bit too big for her
to take in, right now.
What is important is that she is in the FTL comm room, alongside
Kal'Reegar, who is standing ramrod straight, puffing out his chiseled
chest, tightening his weaponized buttocks, jutting out his most
likely pronounced chin underneath his polished, pockmarked helmet
which has seen battles like she can't imagine and warning body
temperature rising would you like cold water circulation?
Ancestors, yes.
And on her other side is Commander Jane Shepard, also standing
ramrod straight, hands folded behind her, puffing out a bust she
wishes she had, standing with a self confidence she wishes she had.
She isn't sure if she has a crush on her or if she wants to be
her. Because she can talk to the man currently standing as the
flickering blue hologram in front of them without flinching.
“ ...though I am curious how your shuttle managed to crash land
on Therum,” Admiral Rael'Zorah vas Rayya nar Idenna says,
“ Reegar, have you gone over the logs?”
“What we could recover, yes,” Kal responds, “Seems we
got some sort of virus. We're going over it now, but we're guessing
we got an electronic attack by the Geth fleet that was in orbit at
the time.”
“Understood. Also, I've looked over your request. You wish to
be temporarily assigned to Shepard's crew?”
“Think it's a good idea,” Kal responds, nodding, “Shepard
and I talked it over. Think of it like a cultural exchange. I'm
going to take five of my boys, we're going to work with Shepard and
her crew” Stands a little straighter. More official. “The
seven of us can provide tactical information on the Geth, and in
return we get to study ship designs and tech we can bring back to the
fleet. Like a sort of extended, second Pilgrimage.”
Rael nods. His gaze centers on Tali.
“ I see.”
“They've both been a big help,” Jane chimes in, “Reegar helped
us with a Geth attack on Therum, and,” she gestures to Tali,
“Tali's the one who found the weakpoint that took down Sovereign.
Also, she's been helping Engineer Adams in maintaining the Normandy's
drive core, and has contributed to boosting the efficiency overall of
the ship.”
Rael makes a sound. She isn't sure if it is an approving sound.
“ Understood.”
“Also, have you gone over the proposal I had Reegar send over?”
Rael nods.
“ Explain to me exactly what you want to do.”
“I'm going to be encountering a lot of Geth,” Jane says, “So I
thought we could send back inert parts. Weapons, cores, tools, which
we would leave at drop off points for the Fleet to pick up. I figure
it could help you study how the Geth have evolved, and maybe develop
a countermeasure or communication protocol with them.”
Rael nods. Beneath his helmet, he furrows his brow.
“ A good idea. If we can study them...yes. Perhaps. It could
give us an advantage if we go to war with them.”
“Or if you want to talk to them.”
“ Yes. Help appreciated, Commander Shepard. Rael'Zorah out.”
The image flickers, and disappears. Tali's shoulders slump, half
turning her head as Kal salutes the both of them.
“Ma'ams. I'm going to go to the men and pick a squad. The rest
will be shipping out later today.”
He walks out, door hissing closed behind him. Tali slumps her
shoulders, and quickly straightens up whens he realizes Jane has
turned to her.
“That went well,” Jane says, “So, what's your plans?”
Tali blinks. She glances from side to side.
“Plans?”
“We've got about eighteen hours before the Kilimanjaro's ready to
launch,” Jane responds, leaning against the railing, finding it
tilting again, “Damn it. Anyway, Kilimanjaro's staff is going to
transfer our things over, so we have shore leave. What're you going
to do?”
She blinks again. She glances from side to side, again.
“So,” Jane says, “Who's your friend? The one who got us
Sovereign's weak point?”
“Mahrek?” Tali asks, “He...um...he's a friend. I take classes
on the extranet. He's a classmate.”
Jane nods.
“I...” Tali fidgets, lacing her fingers together, twisting them
together, “Well, he tells me he lives on the Citadel. I
think...maybe...well, I'm going to see if I can meet him.”
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*giggles* Adorkable Tali is adorkable. 
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04-28-2012, 06:33 PM
Just thought to give you feedback from the "people who don't know ME" POV. Most of what I know about Mass Effect I learned from reading Penny Arcade. I can tell that I'm missing at least a fourth of what you have here, maybe as much as half. Given the amount you jump around, many of the shorter cutscenes make no sense at all. It is *still* awesome, and well worth reading. Thank you.
I'll second that on the whole shorter cut scenes thing... some of them are just inexplicable as their is no internal indication of who it involves. There is an one line cuts that I think are Katsumi/John ones, but could be someone else entirely...
Quote:"I...well, I don't know how to say it. I just find you fascinating."
Its particularly weird and off... though you leave lots of random lines that I had to stop and wonder who said that.
On a side note... I'm pretty sure that shreddering a painting and reassembling it with nanotech should invalidate its value. Though that could just be value dissidence on my part.
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I'm digging this. While you have upgraded Shepard (reasonable given the premise of the story), you are doing a good job maintaining tension by pitting her against an upgraded antagonist as well. So I wouldn't call it a Sue Fic.
I'm loving the Joker bits. And BA is right, your Tali is adorkable 
I have only played ME 1 & 2, so I know I'm missing bits and pieces (some of the shorter bits go completely over my head). But that isn't stopping me from thoroughly enjoying this story.
Looking forward to more...
-Terry
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TF2: Spy
Necratoid Wrote:I'll second that on the whole shorter cut scenes thing... some of them are just inexplicable as their is no internal indication of who it involves. There is an one line cuts that I think are Katsumi/John ones, but could be someone else entirely...
Quote:"I...well, I don't know how to say it. I just find you fascinating."
Its particularly weird and off... though you leave lots of random lines that I had to stop and wonder who said that.
On a side note... I'm pretty sure that shreddering a painting and reassembling it with nanotech should invalidate its value. Though that could just be value dissidence on my part.
Duly noted, and will work on that.
And I think for Kasumi, it's less about the worth of the painting and more about whether she can a) bullshit it, and b) how much fun she has.
Also, here's an OC for your amusement.
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The elevator comes to a halt, and the doors lower with a loud snap.
Two toed feet started marching across the walkway. Ash Williams
found her musing of how to paint a large squid onto the side of the
Normandy interrupted by a loud cough.
“Commander Shepard?”
Eyebrow raised, Ash turns on her heel. Either Skipper needs to get
more photo ops or this isn't someone who's human. Which is exactly
what it turns out to be. Clad in a navy, red trimmed encounter suit,
roughly as tall as her, faint pink glow from behind his mask, the
quarian in front of her gives off a sigh and scratches the back of
his head.
“Yeah, no,” Ash responds, “What do you want?”
“Kal'Ossen vas Citadel,” the quarian says, extending a hand,
“Admiralty board wanted me to help with the repair and resupply
since you've got Migrant Marines onboard.”
“Uh huh.”
“Y'know, set up a clean room, make sure you have Migrant Fleet
approved gruel,” the quarian responds, shrugging, “Everyone keeps
assuming we eat what the turians eat. Well, not exactly true. See,
here's the thing;”
He began explaining. She is, in all honesty, not sure what he was
explaining. Because it apparently had something to do with proteins,
and how proteins on one side don't always match up. And how too much
bacteria can get in bad places. And how turian proteins and quarian
proteins can, if one is not careful, create what he refers to as the
Gravy Train.
“...and then no one's laughing, because no one even wants to look
him in the eye. Got what I'm saying?”
She does. God help her, she does.
“Reminds me of this one time on Illium,” he continues, rubbing
the back of his helmet, “Saw a Krogan drink a liquified Turian.
Technically Krogans can eat anything, right? Well, no one left that
place looking pretty.”
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I've been meaning to mention, the solution to the ME2 treason trial is quite clever. I was wondering how you'd stop it from happening. Having Shepard openly arrange to supply the Quarians with captured Geth equipment means that the project actually makes much more sense.
Matrix Dragon Wrote:I've been meaning to mention, the solution to the ME2 treason trial is quite clever. I was wondering how you'd stop it from happening. Having Shepard openly arrange to supply the Quarians with captured Geth equipment means that the project actually makes much more sense. The thing is, Jane fucked up in the old timeline not due to being paragon or renegade, but by being way too practical, and making what she believed was the best decision at the time. This came back to bite her in the ass, and one of them was, for example, giving the Admirals the evidence during Tali's trial.
Basically, Jane done and went screwed up a lot because she was actually a lot more optimistic about her friends than anything.
Or as I put it on the Spacebattles thread:
"Don't blame Jane. She doesn't have the strategy guide."
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Oh, I know, (I was reading the thread over there) but I was expecting her to stop the events from happening at all, not knocking it onto a track where it still happens, but probably with more oversight and controls in place. Clever.
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I'm actually pretty happy to see this on Fanfiction.net, since I'd seen a few excerpts (copy-pasted by Matrix Dragon) - but didn't want to go through a SpaceBattles thread, because I'm a lazy sonofathingy.
Applause, sir. Looks good so far. The good kind of crazy.
-- Acyl
The skewers, made from something called fishdog, and hence
completely unappetizing towards Kova, sit bare and cleaned on the
plate next to the seat cushion, the only sounds in the room the
incessant taptaptap of fingers on the holographic keyboard.
Her back is to him, and she has, apparently, not noticed him. At
all.
“Excuse-”
“Shhhhhhhhhhhhhhh. Almost updated.”
Hunched over the computer, she scans over something, and after a
long moment turns as the screen blinks off. Two fingered hands and
two toed, sock clad feet brace on the floor and the other occupant of
the room rises, red strands falling around the shoulders as she
stands, wobbles, and falls to the floor with a groan.
“Ow. Sitting too long.”
“Sitting for hours.”
A muttered swear, one which he doesn't recognize and may have fallen
out of use by his time. Shaking his head, he enters, snaps his
fingers, and the overhead lights flash on to her pained moan.
She is now rubbing her ankles. Trying, she protests, to get blood
flowing to her feet again. The short, gangly girl flexes her legs,
shakes her feet, and looks up at Kova with a barest hint of
annoyance. One couldn't blame him, in all honesty, for the way he's
staring at her.
He hasn't seen a female Prothean in a long time.
She's short, gangly. Her gray skin has traces of blue and silver in
its coloring. Her head is narrower than his, her angular dome
softened by the red hair falling in cords over the top of her head,
tapering off to soft strands down the back and sides. Yellow, green
flecked eyes, two on each side of her short, flattened nose glare at
him, but he shrugs.
Her clothes, the ones they found her in, are still being washed,
studied, and if their Hanar hosts are to be believed, historically
documented. They still need to investigate why she's here,
why she was found here, and why the single, solitary stasis pod had
her in it and not someone important.
For right now, they consist of a white shirt, dark blue zipped
jumper and dark blue pants and white socks. She has yet to put on
shoes. They may need to find them, at some point.
“Are you done?” Kova asks, “Because if you are, we can start
investigating.”
“I've only gotten through pre-Asari history, honestly,” she
responds, hands on her back, stretching her back, Kova's gaze
glancing at her chest before back to her face, “Uh...still have to
study up on turians, salarians, earthans-”
“Humans.”
More muttering, as she braces against the floor and stands, shakily
bouncing before rolling her neck.
“So, then what?” she asks, “I really really wanted to
get back to studying. I know I honesty don't have any
projects due anymore because it's been fifty thousand years but I
really wanted to find out about everything around here. Do we
really have to go now?”
Kova stares at her. He blinks.
“You are...not concerned. That it's been fifty thousand years,
and everything you know is dead?”
The girl...shrugs.
“My family died years ago,” she says, “I was up to my eyes in
student debt, apprenticed to a miserable old learnmaker who stared at
my ass, and trying to get a job so I wouldn't have to sell redundant
organs to make rent. What am I missing?”
She taps the bracelet on her left wrist. An old green hologram, a
single globe surrounding her fist, appears. The computer clicks off,
and she taps it closed.
“Meanwhile, I don't even know what killed off the 'Empire,'” she
says, twitching both fingers, “Or why I got stuck in the single
stasis pod at the study site, or why no one bothered to defrost me
thousands of years ago. So the same 'Empire',” air quotes,
twitching fingers, “That jacked up my debt, let my parents die, and
left me to rot on Kahje's gone? Sweet.”
Kova sighs. He shakes his head, glaring at the girl as she picks up
the plate and walks past him. He was exuberant. He was overjoyed.
Then he began talking to the solitary inhabitant of these ruins, that
the Hanar had not found without his help. And of all the ones to
find, he did not find a scientist, or leader, or great wise mind of
the past.
Instead, he found a child.
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So, instead of another warrior, it looks like Kova found a civilian. That's actually rather awesome.
Matrix Dragon Wrote:So, instead of another warrior, it looks like Kova found a civilian. That's actually rather awesome. I describe Vessae in planning with friends as "A prothean Kinsey Kensington." Also, note that she doesn't know what destroyed the Prothean Empire. Which she also thought sucked.
Wait she doesn't know about the war of extinction with the Reapers? Seeing as she doesn't lack curiosity and isn't brain dead that suggest that either she was frozen before the reapers invaded or that the Prothean government was covering it up to some great level.
Though I did have an odd idea float through my brain that she almost got another job and the guy she was working for paniced on losing his eye candy and stuck her in a stasis unit until the offer expired... sounds like no one would have missed her.
Not creepy at all.
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So, my notes upon marathoning the FF.net bits of this:
- The Reapers self-identifying like Yozi was a stroke of genius. If anything ever lived up to their "Each of us is a nation" line and Legion's description of Nazara, it's the multi-soul structure of the Primordials. The fact that their names are as incredibly elaborate as the Yozi also amuses me. Though I find it interesting that Harbinger is apparently a Singular compared to the Many that form Sovereign.
- Sovereign being taken down is interesting, but I have to wonder if he's dead. The Leviathan of Dis was awake enough to take Kharshan in ME3, and the Reaper corpse in ME2 was still mostly alive until Shepard dropped it in a brown dwarf. And, well, if Harbinger ever needed to build Shepard's personal Nemesis, it'd be likely to incorporate the brain of someone driven half-insane with pain, rage, and humiliation over being broken by tiny flesh-things. A Reaper's bad enough. A *berserker* Reaper that wants nothing more than to KILL YOU DEAD even at the expense of its own existence is even worse.
- The scene with Vigil was well done. It really does highlight that Jane is *tired*, and that she has the perfect chance to just let everyone else do the rest of the job for her. But she doesn't. Because that's not who she is.
- I'm finding myself curious who it is that arranged for Thane's wife to be rescued. Someone else knows about the loop, because TIM isn't exactly one to consider sparing Mrs. Krios a worthwhile objective, while Jane didn't have nearly enough time to set it up. And whoever did it was a trained sniper. We can rule out Garrus, as he's a Spectre here and doesn't seem to recognize anything, which leaves people with rifle expertise.... and the only one I can think of that'd fit would be *Legion*.
- Vasir being Garrus' mentor rings some worrying bells, but one wonders if she's more on the up and up these days given that apparently Shadow Broker II: Yahg Boogaloo is instead working as a merc that Shepard's crew just blew up into Yahg kibble.
- I do like the amusing implications of Councilor Tevos' internal monologues. She's on good terms with Aria, because Aria is generally more bargainable with than Patriarch. Combine that with Wrex wondering if Aria actually is his old sparring buddy, and some interesting things could play out.
- No sight of TIM since he authorized Miranda to blow her dad's head off. I have to admit I'm curious what he's up to, given he knows how badly his plan failed the last time.
- Teenage Tali full of hormones is ridiculously amusing. Her internal monologue branching off at the sight of Kal'reegar is far, far too hilarious. "Cold shower?" "Oh, ancestors, yes."
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"Oh, silver blade, forged in the depths of the beyond. Heed my summons and purge those who stand in my way. Lay
waste."
OpMegs Wrote:So, my notes upon marathoning the FF.net bits of this:
- The Reapers self-identifying like Yozi was a stroke of genius. If anything ever lived up to their "Each of us is a nation" line and Legion's description of Nazara, it's the multi-soul structure of the Primordials. The fact that their names are as incredibly elaborate as the Yozi also amuses me. Though I find it interesting that Harbinger is apparently a Singular compared to the Many that form Sovereign. Quote:AN: Yeah, I basically decided that they're either primordials or really high level alchemicals, but more Primordials. Also, bold text them. First and Perfect Sovereign of Nazara, Resplendent Harbinger of Ascension, Jaded Gatemaker of Ages, Ageless Waking Undead Adjucator, Pale First Eternal Leviathan, etc. And yes, the Harbinger thing? On purpose.
Quote:- Sovereign being taken down is interesting, but I have to wonder if he's dead. The Leviathan of Dis was awake enough to take Kharshan in ME3, and the Reaper corpse in ME2 was still mostly alive until Shepard dropped it in a brown dwarf. And, well, if Harbinger ever needed to build Shepard's personal Nemesis, it'd be likely to incorporate the brain of someone driven half-insane with pain, rage, and humiliation over being broken by tiny flesh-things. A Reaper's bad enough. A *berserker* Reaper that wants nothing more than to KILL YOU DEAD even at the expense of its own existence is even worse.
Quote:Wouldn't it be hilarious if "Sovereign chases Joker progressively in angrier forms" is a recurring gag?
Quote:- The scene with Vigil was well done. It really does highlight that Jane is *tired*, and that she has the perfect chance to just let everyone else do the rest of the job for her. But she doesn't. Because that's not who she is.
Quote:Damn straight.
Quote:- I'm finding myself curious who it is that arranged for Thane's wife to be rescued. Someone else knows about the loop, because TIM isn't exactly one to consider sparing Mrs. Krios a worthwhile objective, while Jane didn't have nearly enough time to set it up. And whoever did it was a trained sniper. We can rule out Garrus, as he's a Spectre here and doesn't seem to recognize anything, which leaves people with rifle expertise.... and the only one I can think of that'd fit would be *Legion*.
Quote:Speaking of Legion, wouldn't it be hilarious if Legion did come back, shared the Upgrades with the rest of the Geth, and using their newfound intelligence the Geth factionalized into thousands and thousands of different factions, and a full half of them ended up following the Reapers this time instead of five percent?
Quote:- Vasir being Garrus' mentor rings some worrying bells, but one wonders if she's more on the up and up these days given that apparently Shadow Broker II: Yahg Boogaloo is instead working as a merc that Shepard's crew just blew up into Yahg kibble.
Quote:Sadly, that was not ManBearPig, aka Operative Klechu, aka Shadowbroker.
Quote:- I do like the amusing implications of Councilor Tevos' internal monologues. She's on good terms with Aria, because Aria is generally more bargainable with than Patriarch. Combine that with Wrex wondering if Aria actually is his old sparring buddy, and some interesting things could play out.
Quote:Aria and Tevos had some wild days. Much of which is sealed by layers upon layers of encryption, but may have been the basis of one of those Asari Confessions videos.
Quote:- No sight of TIM since he authorized Miranda to blow her dad's head off. I have to admit I'm curious what he's up to, given he knows how badly his plan failed the last time.
Quote:I had a scene where TIM is asking Dr. Archer a) why the Geth attacked Project Overlord, and b) Why the Geth pistol whipped him three times, but that will be in a later chapter.
Quote:- Teenage Tali full of hormones is ridiculously amusing. Her internal monologue branching off at the sight of Kal'reegar is far, far too hilarious. "Cold shower?" "Oh, ancestors, yes."
Adorkable Tali is Adorkable. She has crushes on everyone. Everyone. Including, following the adventures on Feros, Captain Hannah.
Also, before Spacebattles disappeared up the prolapsed pulsing hole of a forum software upgrade, I did post Arc Numbers:
-4
-6
-837,943
-9
This refer to important events and numbers in the story. At least one of them refers to events in Book 1, one in Book 2, and one refers to a major plot point that is part of the overall arc. And one refers to the actual, total number of time travelers.
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