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Mahou Shoujo Shinto Scion
 
#26
Also, Kami of worldly things (plants, animals, furniture) tend to be either animalistic, without a lot of higher mental functions (this is especially true for spirits of non-living things), or servants of "higher" Kami (foxes are all servants of Inagi, for instance). You're basically asking about the scions of the messengers: Yatagarasu, Kirara, and Mokumoku are technically kami themselves, after all. In another couple hundred years, machine kami might have developed enough lore for full sapience, but for now the question kinda squicks me.

To Sum Up: Animal kami are fully sapient (crows, rabbits, snakes, foxes), but of low inherent magical power (their magic is directly proportional to age) and are usually servants of a higher power anyway. Machine kami are animalistic: creatures of base instinct, lacking higher mental functions. Plant kami can be fully sapient (edit: and highly magical), but are otherwise simply massive and elderly plants of various kinds and so ill-equiped to go about hybridizing themselves with humans.
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#27
Now there's a thought. Slightly off-topic, but the idea of Intelligent Devices as Machine Kami just popped into my head. Making for an interestingly different look at Nanoha-style technomagic. It's not that you need strong AI to make a versatile device... it's just that a well-designed, master-crafted, powerful one, will 'wake up' on its own, just from the sheer amount of mana channelled through it.
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#28
drogan niteflier Wrote:It doesn't seem like Tsukiyomi has been thinking things through very well. He abandons his daughter without any support so she (from what I can tell) has to grow up a yakuza runner, doesn't have a pre-prepared messenger to *get* his daughter's key to her, and in a panic, just grabs the nearest available messenger without thought to any abilities or *why* all his other ones bolted.
As far as it goes, that's completely true. But think about the actions of the three gods in question from the first: Amaterasu settles down with a nice [REDACTED], Susano-o seduces an up-and-coming politician, and Tsukiyomi... Knocks up a prostitute. Because the order was to have a kid, and that was the quickest way to get on with things he wanted to do.

Basically, Tsukusa's papa just isn't a very nice person. He doesn't care.
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#29
Valles Wrote:Basically, Tsukusa's papa just isn't a very nice person. He doesn't care.
O_O;
Odd's that Tsukasa is gonna actually succeed in making him care?  As in, "Damn, I better do something to fix this or else this kid's gonna fuck some shit up."
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#30
Valles Wrote:As far as it goes, that's completely true. But think about the actions of the three gods in question from the first: Amaterasu settles down with a nice [REDACTED],
Why is Amaterasu's husband redacted? Isn't he explicitly stated to be a construction worker in the first episode/chapter?
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#31
Does lead to some questions about what else he might be, doesn't it?

Also, my point about stepping outside one night is... well, for the first time in her life, she knows where to *find* him.  Sure, she can't get to him just yet, but I can definitely see her stepping outside to yell insults, threats, and recriminations directly at his incarnation as the moon.

Mind you, I could totally see Yoko doing something similar - though it'd likely be rather less loud, and rather less angry.

Also... there's a thing that perturbs me about the economy of the whole thing.  A billion yen up front, and a million a month.  12 million a year.  80-some-odd years later, she's made her signing bonus in monthly pay.  These numbers, they do not go together.  I don't have any idea how much yen is really worth, but there shouldn't be three orders of magnitude difference between the two.  That's like offering someone a million as a signing bonus and a yearly salary of 12,000 (with a minimum work period of three years, to boot).  It makes no sense.
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#32
Makes sense to me, Sirrocco. The bonus is like seed money, to get things rolling. The 1 billion yen translates to about 12.5 million USD. There's more than a few corporate execs around that make that much money and then some. Afterwards, she's got a monthly salary of 1 million yen, or about 12.5 thousand USD. Not exactly chump change, but again this is a realistic figure as in the US Military officers at paygrade O-10 (Four Star General/Admiral) make 13,685.10 USD a month for their base pay in the 2012.

I can see most of the 1 billion yen going to setting up a few things. Better living accommodations, setting up her information network (Yakuza bosses everywhere will kowtow to her if not for her divine heritage then because of her power), setting up protection for people close to her, etc... and then everything else gets dumped into the stock market, either to accumulate interest or dividends. And her 'regular salary' will just help maintain things.
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#33
Only if she has decent cash management skills, which isn't common if she isn't used to it.
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#34
I freely confess to complete ignorance about the usual ratio of signing bonus to salary; the signing bonus was calculated to be comparable to the price of a new tank, helicopter, or other major piece of equipment, while the salary was more-or-less aimed at being 'a good living'. I suspect that those numbers are also before the 'dependent family' adjustments that Tsukusa qualifies for are taken into account, and I also have no clue what the JSSDF's standards for such would be.

Even so, the amount the girls are making is chump change compared to what the Japanese government is shelling out to try and deal with the problem using 'conventional' tools.

As to Reiji, you'll find out next chapter. Tsukiyomi, however, won't be showing up for a while.

Eventually, but not for a while. I could hardly leave Tsukusa's issues unresolved by ignoring him, after all.
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#35
Well, 150K/year (which apparently is what 1 million yen/month approximates to) isn't a terrible number.  It's going to be hugely more than whatever it is she's making right now, but it's not entirely unreasonable for a high-end salary.  Signing bonus of 10-12 times that would be generous, but not unreasonable under the circumstances.  So... 10 million up front, 1 million per month is going to be affordable and more than enough to draw in the daughters of the sun and the moon (in that whole "welcome to no longer having to worry about money" sort of way).  It may or may not be enough *money* to pull in Izuna (depending on exactly how popular she is as a model), but I'd definitely see her joining in out of various forms of "help out mom" - both politically and in that whole "directly assaulting the problem that's stressing her out" sort of way.

As for paying for tanks... based on what they've seen, these girls are definitely hot stuff, and they want them in the field, but there's no real evidence as yet that they're going to perform at the level of *tanks*.  They're able to take out threats that can easily take out a squad or so of trained individuals with small arms.  That's not "major military machinery" levels.  Not yet.

Tsukasa's an interesting case with respect to cash management.  On the one side, she's real good at poverty management by now.  She also knows better than to spend more than she has (or at least she should, as she lives on the other side of that equation).  I could see her going a little crazy with the money... but I could also see her arbitrarily deciding to save, like half of it, under the theory that she never knows when this particular good thing is going to end.  Ending her current job without offending anyone she doesn't want to offend could also be interesting.

It also occurred to me... Tsukasa has a fairly strong nurturing instinct.  Mokumoku is... an easily terrified servitor of a God who is Not A Nice Guy.  I could totally see Mokumoku really coming to appreciate the change in leadership, and the two of them bonding over not liking Tsukiyomi very much.
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Mahou Shoujo Shinto Scion

Episode Four:
“Trinity”

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Her father’s hushed phone call once she - and Yatagarasu - had explained what had happened had summoned a dark, discreet sedan with government license plates and a rather less discreet escort of Tokyo Metropolitan Police squad cars and Self Defense Force jeeps rigged with armor plating and machine guns on top. A very polite driver had held the door for them, and then the entire convoy set off through the streets of Tokyo with a giant crow fluttering overhead and Yoko and her father seated on either side of the rear bench seat.

Eventually, she broke the tense silence and asked, “Did you know who Mom was - is - Daddy?”

Satou Reiji sighed and said, “She never told me, and I never challenged her on it, but... Yes.”

“So I didn’t get to know that, either,” she said bitterly. “Just like I don’t get to know if she has any hobbies or if she could cook or what she liked for dinner or even if she’d be proud of me or not!”

“Yoko, this isn’t-”

“Isn’t the time? Just like it’s never been the time to know anything, no matter how trivial?” She glared, years worth of words finally tumbling out. “There’s a hell of a lot of difference between keeping ‘Oh, hey, you’re a demigoddes’ under your hat and making half of everything I am into a total blank spot!”

Reiji held up on hand, a wordless ‘stop’ signal he’d used before, and put a lash of command into his voice. “Yoko!”

“No, Daddy,” she told him grimly. “I’ve put up with this for as long as I can remember, cried myself to sleep every birthday and special night we’ve ever had, and now there’s something this incredible being dropped on top of me? You’re not getting out of this just because you’re my father. I’m not a little girl you can just order or put off any more.”

Her father stared at her like he’d never seen her before, then leaned back in his seat with a sad sigh. “The most wide-ranging type of Finding is a spell that locates particular thoughts,” he said. “It requires knowing the particular phrase or belief you seek, and too much power for any mortal mage to use more than once or twice in a lifetime, but for a god who knew your mother, all they would have had to do would be seek a mind that connected any of those things you’d otherwise have known with the idea of ‘my mother’... and they’d have found you.”

“Me and however many thousands of other girls,” Yoko said.

“I knew it bothered you. But not that much.”

When Reiji opened his eyes at the long pause that followed that statement, he found himself being glared at through slitted golden eyes. “How do you know about things like search spells anyway?” his daughter asked.

Reiji looked back at her for a long moment, then sighed quietly. “Before you were born, I was an agent of the Exorcism Division.”

“What,” she asked sharply, “like Spirit Crime Investigations, a cop ‘busting demons for the Emperor’?”

He chuckled. “Not so dramatically, and not so neatly, but yes.”

Barely - just barely, by remembering all the times that he’d picked her up after she skinned her knee, the happy days he’d taken her to a park after he got off work, all the warm moments of a loving childhood - Yoko kept herself from asking if he’d meant for her to get herself killed out of sheer ignorance.

She looked out the window and didn’t say anything more, and both of them spent the rest of the ride thinking silently.

* * * * * * *

Tsukusa wasn’t sure what she’d expected to find in the private office of the Prime Minister of Japan, but it wasn’t a snake, a raven, and two girls her own age. The PM herself, sure, in all her porn-star-playing-a-politician glory, and the wiry guy in the cheap suit with the nothing-to-prove stone badass’s eyes wasn’t out of the range of the possible, but the menagerie and the chick and the amazon with the funny colored eyes were surprises.

Then the relay clicked. She herself was carrying a rabbit, after all. And a snake and a crow would mean...

Always be daring. “Yo,” she said, waving the hand that wasn’t full of bunny. “Take it you’re the cousins? Suzuki Tsukusa, nice ta meetcha.”

“Satou Yoko, please treat me kindly,” the shorter of the two stunners said, bowing from her seat. She had a sweet, pure voice, completely unlike Tsukusa’s own faint rasp, curves going in and out in exactly the right places, and looked to be caught between a serious mad on and being even more nervous than Tsukusa herself felt.

“Tanaka Izuna,” the tall one said, slightly amused and perfectly comfortable - as she should be, since, unless Tsukusa was remembering her face from somewhere completely different, they were in her own mother’s office. Her voice, under the la-de-da diction, was low, dark, and rich, like molten chocolate, and nobody shorter could’ve pulled off that figure without looking like a caricature.

“Welcome,” Izuna’s mom said, putting an edge on the word that snapped Tsukusa’s eyes over to her face and convinced the hairs on the back of her neck that she did not ever want to be in serious trouble with her. “I apologise for starting before you could arrive, Suzuki-kun, but there were several things I needed to discuss with Satou-san.”

Tsukusa glanced at Yoko, then realized that the other adult must be her father. There was a slight resemblance.

“The political details aren’t relevant,” Tanaka said, “But in practice the three of you have been recruited to be part of the special detachment the National Police are creating to deal with Izanami’s attacks.”

“Like the Tokyo Police keep for shooting up terrorists and busting down doors,” Tsukusa said, firmly ignoring the voice of sensible caution that said that being a smart alec with this lady might not be the best idea. Fortunately, the Prime Minister looked amused.

“For the undead rather than extremist groups, yes. The Imperial Household Agency’s Exorcism Division advises me that they estimate another month at the current rate of attacks before they are no longer able to support the Police and Self-Defense Force to any useful degree. Until that time, your task will be to learn to replace them.”

“But...” Yoko said, frowning in confusion, “If they’re having trouble, and we didn’t - much - then why...?”

“Collateral damage,” the younger Tanaka said. “I’m pretty sure that all three of us can make quite a mess if we’re not careful.”

“Um...” the golden-eyed girl said, looking a bit embarrassed and a bit alarmed.

“Never been in a fight?” Tsukusa asked, deciding that the tall girl’s rueful tone meant she hadn’t been taking a swipe of some sort at her.

“Not really, no.”

“Not that complicated,” Tsukusa assured her. “Bust their chops before they bust yours.”

“At the most basic level, yeah,” the older Satou said, and Tsukusa could see the anger flare up again in his daughter’s expression. The kid was pissed at her old man, and for something recent. Smart money’d say she hadn’t had a clue about the whole ‘goddess’ deal any more than Tsukusa herself had. “The problem is, Izanami’s soldiers won’t play fairly any more than the JSDF or an assassin would. You’ll need to learn the tricks that will keep you alive anyway even when they are expecting you.”

“And you wanna be sure we can take orders,” Tsukusa said.

“And we want to be certain you can take orders,” the Prime Minister agreed, “and that you can control your abilities well enough to damage only what you wish to harm - or, if that proves impossible, that you will refrain until the alternative becomes worse.”

“Hey, look,” Tsukusa said instinctively, “I didn’t wreck a goddamn thing.”

“No,” the princess said, looking chagrined under the layer of ice-cube control, “but I did. Quite comprehensively.”

“Oh yeah? What’d you blow up?”

“Akihabara.”

“...All of it?” Satou said, looking guilty, like she was glad to be talking about somebody else’s screwup rather than her own. Tsukusa guessed that she’d done a number on wherever she was, too.

“Not quite all of it. Just the electronic parts.”

Given just how many toy and computer stores were crammed into that trendy shopping district, Tsukusa wasn’t sure just how much the cost of those damages would run, but she knew it’d be in the tens of billions of yen.

“Daaaaaamn,” she said, impressed.

* * * * * * *

After that meeting, the three girls had been shuffled off into the care of a team of six doctors - four extremely distinguished looking older gentlemen, a massive, muscular fellow that looked more like a prize fighter in a labcoat, and a tubby, cheerful, somewhat younger one that had greeted Yoko by name. Since Izuna could recognize one of the ‘elder statesmen’ as her own doctor, it was easy to conclude that one of the other four knew Tsukusa and the other three were eminent specialists.

Somehow, she suspected that it was the scary one that had been serving as her ‘family doctor’.

Mentally, Izuna cataloged their attitudes; Yamada-sensei was more worried than she’d ever seen him, and Yoko’s doctor seemed to be of the same mind despite his good nature and efforts to be reassuring. The looming one - he could have given Izuna half a head, and that didn’t happen often - seemed completely unperturbed, asking and answering questions in concise, clipped sentences and completely ignoring the rest of the group’s occasional burst of speculation. The three specialists, though, were, to a man, polite, voluably helpful, and obviously fighting to restrain immense excitement.

A less reverent corner of her mind wondered if there had been any literal blood on the floors in the research community for the privilege of being here.

After a long and unusually thorough period of blood pressure cuffs, stethoscopes, blood samples, swabs, and other familiar and non-objectionable examinations, the girls were each divided into small individual examination rooms.

“We don’t know what will be important to know to try and figure out what your abilities do, precisely,” Yamada-sensei began, “or what effects their activation might have on you. In order to-”

He was interrupted by Tsukusa, bellowing an outraged, “WHAT?!” from the examination room next door.

She let the awkward silence go on for a moment, while her mind put the pieces together and conjured an image of Tsukusa sitting on an examination couch, eyes dark and hard through the furious blush chasing its way from her cheeks down her neck and shoulders to the deep, inviting depth of cleavage framed when her arm cradled those full breasts for what modesty she could achieve when-

Izuna shook her head sharply, banishing the image. She’s your cousin, remember that!

“You need us to strip, in case we share some kind of distinctive birthmark or something.”

“Or if your scars start regenerating or something of that nature,” Yamada-sensei agreed. “Thank you for understanding.”

Izuna got up to double-check and make certain the door was locked. “I won’t pretend I like the thought, but I have to concede the logic. You’ll want pictures, I imagine?”

“I’m afraid so.”

She sighed and started to slip out of her clothes. “At least it’s you,” she said.

Yamada-sensei had, after all, been the person she’d talked to to try and figure out why the girl she sat next to all through Junior High had been making her stomach feel all fluttery, who’d shown her that ‘The Closet’ was a survivable prison. Even if he had had any interest in women, she’d still have trusted him.

When, after the examination, Yamada-sensei handed her a hospital gown and picked up the room’s phone, Izuna had a sudden sinking feeling.

The roar of “THE FUCK I AM!” from next door added a bit of deja vu to the worry.

“What now, Yamada-sensei?”

“Now,” he said, “I’m afraid that we need to ask you to let us record your transformation.”

“Naked.”

“Regrettably.”

Izuna spent several moments tamping her own temper down while Tsukusa’s voice, quiet enough to be blurred but still easily identifiable, ranted furiously, then sighed. “All right,” she said, “Let’s go, if they’re ready for us.”

* * * * * * *

Yoko sat in the waiting room with her two new cousins, killing time while the ‘dye’ the doctors had had them take propagated through their bodies. To distract herself from the urge to play with her own hair - it had gone from an ordinary black to white, and she was pretty sure it would glow in the dark - she said, “So, um... what do you two do for fun?”

The scary one who’d shown up carrying the moon-rabbit stopped playing with her own stone-grey locks and gave Yoko a funny look. “Funny thing to ask at a time like this,” she said.

“Perhaps,” the PM’s daughter said, giving Yoko a reassuring smile. “But it broke the ice, didn’t it?”

“Guess it did,” Tsukusa said, then chuckled as Yoko leg go the breath she’d been holding. “Princess is used to havin’ bodyguards around, but you- shit, what’d I say?”

Izuna had gone stone white halfway through the tough girl’s sentence. “My detail... most of them... didn’t make it through the zombie attack where I...”

She trailed off, looking stricken.

“Shit,” Tsukusa said again. “I’m sorry.”

Yoko frowned. “Isn’t it strange that all three of us ended up needing to fight more or less just as we found out about, well, who your fathers and my mother are? I mean, Yatagarasu showed up the morning before, for me, but compared to eighteen years, that’s still cutting it really close.”

“Mokumoku showed up a couple months ago, for me,” Tsukusa offered.

Izuna frowned, playing with some of her hair without any attention to the fact that it had turned light electric blue. “Kirara never said how he knew where I’d be,” she said, with a thoughtfulness that was ominous.

“Talk to the rabbit, first?” Tsukusa suggested after a moment.

“Because she did the best job tracking?” Yoko asked.

“Best odds on a straight answer,” was the reply. “The crow’s got that big-shot sorta smooth and the snake’s said flat-out he’s a hatchet man - if they’ve got agendas, they’ll hide ‘em rather than givin’ us what we want to know.”

“But,” Izuna said, continuing the thought and making a visible effort to shake off her grief, “Mokumoku is all but ready to start your personal cult.”

Tsukusa started to glare, then visibly decided to drop it. Yoko made a mental note to thank her for that - their tall cousin still looked kind of shaky, even if she was willing to start trying to make jokes.

More or less. The tiny moon-rabbit was definitely in great awe of her master.

Yoko giggled as an image came to her mind.

The other two looked at her oddly, so she explained. “Picture her in little miko’s robes, waving a gohei and-”

Izuna laughed, and Tsukusa groaned and dropped her face comically into one palm.

Inwardly, Yoko smiled in satisfaction. Not only had the joke helped cheer Izuna out her sudden black mood, it had finished breaking the initial awkwardness. "Actually, she said thoughtfully, "we really will need to put that on our serious question list."

"What, you want people goin' and worshippin' at your used underwear?" Tsukusa teased.

"Well, no," Yoko said, "but having an order of hunky priests dedicated to my every whim miiiight be worth putting up with it."

Both of them laughed, then Yoko said, "But seriously, I doubt any of the old cults were just about the ego. If it's something that's no use right now, that's one thing, but I bet we're gonna want to know... Daddy never talks about Mom much," her voice darkened momentarily as she said that, but she made herself brighten as she went on, "but I don't see him with anyone shallow enough to just want to be grovelled to."

"Sounded like Her Scariness told you more about your old man, Princess. What d'you think?" Tsukusa asked, but the tallest of the three was sitting with a Mona-Lisa smile on her face and a faint blush on her cheeks, and her eyes completely unfocused.

Yoko giggled. "I think she's still on the priests."

Izuna snapped out of her daze and glared icily for a moment. Tsukusa glared back, and Yoko's heart started to sink with the sudden conviction that she'd be stuck trying and failing to break up an argument.

Then Izuna sighed and admitted, "More or less."

"What," Tsukusa needled, still making a face like she was expecting a fight, "You'd rather have miko?"

"Of course not," Izuna said. "Miko have to stay virgins."

Tsukusa snickered, and then all three of them were laughing before Izuna continued. “But even thinking over things in retrospect, I don’t think she ever said anything about worship. Versions of all the famous stories, and others about what he was like after they met, but nothing, well, useful to figuring out what it means to be a god.”

“Well, that’s a dead end, then,” Yoko said, trying not to be too bitter and probably mostly failing. She sighed, then forced a smile onto her face. “So, seriously - what do you do for fun in Caviar Land?”

"Caviar is revolting,” Izuna said, making a face. “Actually, I tend to enjoy the same things as anyone else. I read comics, watch TV, go shopping, play console and computer games... Nothing strange or rarified."

"Oh yeah," Tsukusa asked, leaning forward and looking interested. "Which ones? What kind? Roleplaying, shooters, fighting games, MMOs...?"

"I like MMOs," Yoko said, "when I can afford them."

“I play Worlds Above, Worlds Below, myself,” Izuna said.

Tsukusa grinned. “Sweet. What server?”

“Aerie, for the most part.”

“Ditto,” Yoko said, raising her hand like she was in school.

“That makes three. I’ve got a pet-based build that’s pretty sweet, and I’ve been starting work on a real shoot-all-the-things damage hose.”

Yoko giggled. “I’ve never been able to focus that much. The closest I’ve come is Sunsword, and she’s-”

Tsukusa groaned and facepalmed again, making Yoko blink at her worriedly. “What?”

“Princess?” the tough asked without lifting her head.

“Yes?” Izuna sounded like she had a pretty solid idea what was up, even though Yoko herself was clueless.

“Stormward?”

“Yes.”

Oh. So, if Tsukusa recognized both of their handles, then-

Tsukusa bolted out of her seat and started to pace. “Somebody’s totally fucking with us,” she said.

Izuna caught the eye of one of the nurses and nodded her over, and Yoko nibbled on her lip thoughtfully. “We really need to talk to the rabbit,” she said.

* * * * * * *

The doctors had tried to explain just what the scanner bed they had the girls take turns with was and did, but Tsukusa’d tuned that bit out, too busy chewing on the deeply alarming idea that she’d been set up months ago - or rather, that it had happened years before that.

That what had happened to her mother hadn’t been the stupid callous waste of reality or her own weakness, but someone else’s deliberate plan.

She didn’t like that thought. She didn’t like being the person she was when she thought it; too likely to make Kishi and the twins cry.

By the time all three of them had gone through the machine twice, once as magical girls and once as themselves, Yoko and Izuna were visibly antsy and Tsukusa herself was ready to start wrecking things out of sheer frustration.

When she saw that their next minder was military, she smiled. It looked like they’d be getting a chance to do just that.

During the car ride - they were in an armored limo, of all things - Tsukusa turned to their minder and said, “Hey, look, Sunshine, Princess, and I were talking...” and told him about their having met through gaming before, and the names they’d ‘chosen’ for their characters.

“...It makes sense for her, since she said her mom always made jokes about her dad bein’ who he turns out ta be,” she finished, “but Sunshin an’ I never had a clue, and we still got prime names that turn out to be ban on and run into each other and hang out? Plus the way the crow and snake show up right on time?”

She shook her head. “That’s fishy.”

Their silver-haired handler considered what she’d told him, and nodded. “I’m told that the timing factor is something Intelligence is already focusing on...” he said in that smoker’s rasp of his. “They’ll probably have questions for you about it tomorrow.”

“Not this evening?” Yoko asked.

“This evening, all three of you have dinner meetings.”

Izuna leaned forward, making Tsukusa’s eyes flick aside to avoid her shirt’s neckline. “With whom?”

Tsukusa and the general shifted slightly to maintain their balance as the limo built up speed pulling onto the expressway, trying to drag them off of the rear-facing bench. “The Papal Nuncio has asked to meet with all three of you individually, and, for yourself and Satou-san, with your parents... Your own meeting is tonight.” His expression turned faintly uncomfortable. “Suzuki-san has been scheduled to meet with a private citizen named Yamaguchi Gorou, while Satou-san has been asked to attend upon the Imperial Household.”

There was a nervous, horribly cliche squeaking noise, and only after she saw Izuna raise a hand to cover her smile did Tsukusa realize that she and Yoko had hit exactly the same pitch at exactly the same moment.

“I can’t help with a legitimate businessman like Yamaguchi-san,” the politician’s daughter said, still visibly suppressing a smile, “but His Imperial Majesty is a perfectly nice old man.”

* * * * * * *

The ‘fire tests’, to the surprise of all three girls, took place under the eye and command of Yoko’s father, two them with him and the cameramen in a bunker while the third followed instructions through a radio headset. Tsukusa had been as puzzled by that as she had, until Yoko pointed out that they already knew that at least two of them could accidentally splash enough power and energy around to kill someone - or worse, in Yoko’s own case, condemn them to a horrible screaming death from radiation sickness.

Izuna couldn’t really blame her for being in favor of more safety, not when the girl had looked green enough that her usual reaction for wanting to take a pretty girl in her arms hadn’t perked itself back into her consciousness until after her (cousin, dammit!) friend had started to cheer up.

Even her hormones, though, couldn’t tempt her into wanting to get in the middle of the vicious fight that was obviously building on the daughter’s side of that family. The father’s instructions all seemed to refer to games he had taught her when she was a child, and Yoko got tenser and tenser with every new exercise.

“It’s not just that she’s embarrassed, is it?” she murmured to Tsukusa in a quiet aside.

“You ever heard of any of these games, Princess? They’re magic exercises - and he taught ‘em to her without ever sayin’, I bet. She’s pissed about the mushroom routine.”

Kept in the dark and fed on bullshit. It made sense, and was obvious enough to make Izuna feel like an idiot for missing it.

Tsukusa grinned at her expression. “Don’t sweat it. Your mom’s job just teaches you the wrong sort of cynical.”

She wasn’t sure that cynical was the right term for it, but it was close enough that Izuna wasn’t inclined to quibble. “And Yoko, of course, simply isn’t, which is why she’s so hurt.”

“Probably,” Tsukusa agreed, and cocked an eyebrow at her. “You gonna meddle?”

“Not yet,” Izuna said. “Not until I’m sure what the best way would be.”

A few minutes later, Yoko came back into the bunker and stood in the ‘airlock’ while the technician in the lead-lined hazmat suit ran a Geiger counter’s wand up and down her body.

One of the uniformed technicians in the bunker - his name tag said ‘Yamanaka’ - made a note on his clipboard. “The target is going to be going in with spent reactor fuel for disposal and she hasn’t taken a rad. Forget justice, where is logic?” he muttered.

Yoko make a nauseated face again, so Izuna turned to Tsukusa and smirked. “Oh, by the way,” she said.

The dark-eyed girl gave her a wary look, probably detecting trouble from the note of amusement in her voice. “Yeah?”

You owe me lunch.”

For a moment, Tsukusa just stared at her cluelessly, before apparently remembering her promise to pay for the meal if the other two’s descriptions of themselves turned out to be accurate. She took a step back and gave her as blatant an elevator eye as she’d ever received in her life. For once, receiving it felt good - alarmingly good.

“Damn. Guess I do.” She glanced at Yoko, who was giving her father a chilly glare as he explained something to General Moto. “And Sunshine, too, come to that.”

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Glossary:

Notes of the Prime Ministry - Japan's system of government elects representatives for each district to the two houses of the National Diet, which selects a candidate to become the Prime Minister, the head of the executive branch, who is then formally appointed by the Emperor and retains the office until voted out by the lower house of the Diet, the House of Representatives. If Tanaka Himari were to be appointed to her office in our time line, she would be both the youngest (by one year) and the first female holder of the title; in the world of Mahou Shoujo Shinto Scion, she still holds both of these distinctions.

Tokushu Butai - Or, in English, Special Assault Teams. These are the Japanese version of the SWAT Team concept. Strictly speaking, all of them belong to the National Police Agency, which permanently assigns individual teams to work in the jurisdiction of particular municipal or prefectural police forces. Besides busting the heads that really need busted, the Tokyo team is also responsible for responding to threats to foreign embassies and for security at the Imperial Palace, Prime Minister's residence, and National Diet.

Kunai-cho - The branch of Japan's government known as the Imperial Household Agency is the only one that doesn't answer to the Prime Minister, and its remit covers the preservation and encouragement of traditional Japanese culture, the arrangement of state visits, the care and keeping of the official seals, and so on. With its tendency to try and retain customs otherwise outmoded in regard to the Imperial Family, as well as a history dating back to 701 CE, the Agency seemed the most likely place to find the very-traditionally trained 'Exorcism Division' responsible for suppressing hostile spirits and so on, although to the best of my knowledge no such group exists in the real world.

Miko - A 'shrine maiden', a virginal female attendant to a Shinto shrine who's responsible for specific sorts of ritual and practical cleansing and other rituals. Their classical dress is extremely distinctive, combining red hakama (wide, pleated pants) with a white haori (a traditional jacket or overcoat). Part of certain rituals of blessing involves an instrument called a gohei, a straight wooden stick with two zig-zagging paper streamers on the 'business' end. Probably the most famous example of a shrine maiden to Western fans will be Sailor Moon's Hino Rei.

Nuncio - From the Latin nuntius. A Papal Nuncio is the Holy See's version of an Ambassador.

Legitimate Businessman - To the best of my knowledge, Japanese organized crime does not use that particular coded phrase, but they tend to be more open about their existence and association with each other than their western counterparts. It would probably be known to anyone who was interested that the head of the largest yakuza clan was, for instance, Yamaguchi Gorou, even if the Law Enforcement agencies responsible for catching him didn't feel they had sufficient evidence to force a conviction.
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#37
Yay!

I had actually just been thinking about this fic the other day.

Now to go back to reread the earlier chapters to get back some of the lost continuity-bits.
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#38
I'm coming late to the review party I guess:
For the first chapter I find the transformation sequence/seal loosening bit Clunky.  I'm really not sure how she managed know who her mom was.  Her dad was listed as unhelpful in the extreme.  She apparently didn't read it off the compact.  No flash of insight.  She just randomly seemed to suddenly know for no detailed reason.  Is this just me not having the historical background to recognise the compact from legend... it just felt like rather clunky.  Like I somehow missed a paragraph.
Yes, this was explained in thread... but not in story.  It wasn't changed so its still a valid point.  That and chapter 4 has some notes... chapter one could use the same thing.
Second chapter... actually felt rather natural.  The cursing was more regional dialect than offensive.
Third chapter I'd echo the body count confusion a bit.  Not on the girls so much as the I thought there were also armed rent-a-cops at the door (zombie attacks and all), not personal retainers on my read through.  Though I guess that was an object lesson in pointing with bullets and not shouting and pointing with fingers.. Seriously they died because some idiot taunted the witch, rather than crowning her.  Tactically, he should have opened fire in a direction and not made himself a target.  Also, I'm not sure what condition the 'Witch's' head was in after all those rounds.
Chapter 4 was interesting... what stuck out as annoying was the questioning why one whose self and 3 sibling all have names with the prefix 'moon' would chose the name Moonspawn.  This seemed like a stupid thing to complain about.
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So far the plot seems to be... Pantheon head informs his kids they are having mortal heirs now... and buggers off... Underworld goddess, then waits until the kids are of age and sends undead fodder and their commanders to Japan to kill until they find them.  As late as possible said heirs are given seal dampening items to deal with said corpse waves.  Sounds like the Pantheon head spent the last decade and a half bumming around with the head deadhead setting up a betting pool... possibly an MMORPG
Meanwhile, the Sun Goddess picks a priest as a mate.  Was coy with him for a while... then left him to scar their offspring by making her have to play spy games to get anything out of her dad... Apparently so she is full of blinding righteous rage or something.  Even her minion/mentor is vague at her.  Its like they wanted a nuclear berserker or something.
The Moon guy picks up a hooker or something and lets her self destruct and his heir raise her other kids.  Then sends an unsealing item that is actually useful to her combat style.  Also, a minion/mentor ahead of time...
The third one apparently took a famous official mistress... that can easily provide for her and gives her a huge networking support base.  Then only makes the mistake of forgetting to tip the mom off in what weapon her kid should train in.
Its kind of weird the one that apparently picked a mate at random (apparently) seems to have put the most thought into things at the tails end.  Also, that the most criminal one had the least destructive debut fight and actually works the best with conventional forces.  I kind of wonder if the rabbit is actually in awe of how grounded his demigoddess lady is... Possibly this was a calculation move to raise a demigoddess that wasn't going to suck to be around near as much as her sire's other relatives.
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#39
Mmm. I will, eventually, want to do a tighten-and-polish pass on previous episodes, including adding applicable glossaries, but for the time being that's on hold in favor of working to maintain forward momentum.

The thing about the witch encounter is that these are not gamers playing Left 4 Dead who know what a Witch is and what her behaviors are like - these are professional bodyguards who have no idea what they're dealing with. So alerting their fellow guards of a potential threat is absolutely the right thing for them to be trained to do. They'd have no way of knowing what a horrible mistake that is in this case.

I am, somewhat shamefully, not sure what kanji the Suzuki siblings' names use, but it's not 'tsuki'. Tsukusa has heard the 'tsuki-usagi' gag before, of course, so her picking the name she did is not, entirely, shocking. It's when you combine it with the other two doing exactly the same thing that it becomes suspicious and indicative of something approaching fate-fuckery. Given how Tsukusa's life has treated her to date, I think you can see how the last'd be irritating to her.

Plotwise, I should probably keep most of the things you're wondering about under wraps, but the fact that Tsukusa's gauntlet is actually applicable to how her fighting style works is literally just fortunate coincidence. He just grabbed the first thing to come to hand and hung the appropriate spell on it, as I should probably show in a scene with Mokumoku eventually. The one who put the most thought into his 'gift' was actually Susano-o - it might not be the exact sort of sword Izuna's trained with, but it's more than close enough for her to adapt, and the length of the blade is part of its most famous name. Keeping Yoko completely in the dark was her father's idea, not her mother's - there are actually good reasons for it, but Amaterasu wouldn't've thought of them, and she is the kind of person whose logic would run 'I thought a magical girl talisman would be cute'.
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Necratoid Wrote:For the first chapter I find the transformation sequence/seal loosening bit Clunky.  I'm really not sure how she managed know who her mom was.  Her dad was listed as unhelpful in the extreme.  She apparently didn't read it off the compact.  No flash of insight.  She just randomly seemed to suddenly know for no detailed reason.  Is this just me not having the historical background to recognise the compact from legend... it just felt like rather clunky.  Like I somehow missed a paragraph.
It could be a lack of context, yes. Being told one is descended from a Japanese god who sends one a mirror is somewhat like being told that one is descended from an American folk-legend who sends one an axe... It's no big stretch to assume "Amaterasu" in the first case or "Paul Bunyan" in the second, because the items are so closely linked to the characters.
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Especially when the bearer of said axe is a blue cow, yes.
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Quote:or, if that proves impossible, that you will retain until the alternative becomes worse.” 
I think you meant 'refrain' here, not 'retain'.

Quote:The looming one - he could have given Izuna half a head, and that didn’t happen often
I'm not sure what you are trying to say here.
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*fixes typo*

Izuna is 5' 11"; being half a head taller than her makes him on the order of 6' 3" or 6' 4". In Japan.
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Valles Wrote:*fixes typo*

Izuna is 5' 11"; being half a head taller than her makes him on the order of 6' 3" or 6' 4". In Japan.
Ah, you were talking about height, then?  Wouldn't it be clearer to say that he had half a head on her, rather than saying that he could have given her half a head?
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*puzzled* ...That's what I did say.
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No, you said
Quote: he could have given Izuna half a head
I've never encountered this sort of height measurement phrased like this before.  When I've seen it, it has always been possessive or neutral, such as "X had/has a head on Y", or "X is a head taller than Y". 
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#47
Then your experience has differed from mine.

Anyway. I'll keep it noted for my eventual Rebuild pass once I've finished the story.
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#48
I've been enjoying this for some time.

I think it is fairly tightly put together.

I really like the relationships.

The cosmology, magic, and world building is fairly interesting.

I'm kind of wondering if Tsukasa's siblings are full siblings. If so, I had some thoughts about what that might imply about the scenario, but it has been long enough I'm not sure I can recapture then. Mainly speculation about whether her mother had been aware and willing.

I like the details of the fight scenes, especially the psychological. The sensory details, in general, are also good.

I have Nadeshiko written in as a possible 'nami daughter.

Sorry about not having this put together sooner. (I had a, I thought, very amusing and or obnoxious comment about the Ugly American line that got edited out.)

I look forward to more of this.

Oh, and I think the could of given half a head usage works, and is one that I have seen.

Chapter 1

For now, before the heat of the day kicked in, the apartment was only a bit warm, and Yoko dug into her breakfast with a will. when she opened her eyes, she found her father watching her, his own food untouched and a wistful smile on his face. “What?” she asked, a little creeped out.

When she

It was a few minutes later, when she got her bike - an ancient, half-rusted relic, but it worked - off of the rack by their apartment building’s parking, that the day started getting strange. The biggest bird she’d ever seen in person, a raven as long as her arm, was perched on the top of the rack, watching her. when she approached to unlock her bike, it flapped over to a nearby fence and cocked its head to keep staring at her with one dark eye.

When she

The walking dead, as impossible as it sounded... they were quicker and more agile in real life than in most games or fiction, but still less so than a healthy adult. No magic or acid vomit, and now bows or other ranged weapons save rotten javelins. Running was, in fact, what the sober, worried talking heads had recommended - most people in modern-day Tokyo weren’t athletic enough to properly outrun the untiring dead, but the few minutes they could keep ahead of the monsters were long enough for the Police and Japanese Self Defense Force units the government had stationed throughout the city to begin to respond.

no bows or other ranged weapons

Yoko was out of her crater and charging again before she realized it, riding a wave of fury that she knewwas mostly panic. It felt like running across a field of warm mud in her bare feet, and everything on the street was so very bright that she could see the shield that had repulsed her before, like a dome of dark smoke that left the false policeman half-visible at its center

she knew was mostly panic

chapter 2

The scene was surreal enough on its own - children huddled like a solid knot of disaster victims, surrounded by a protective ring of white-faced adults, all nervously watching the barred doors and blocked windows as the unfamiliar pop and chatter of gunfire, flavored with screams and shouted orders and warnings, went on outside - but the sudden appearance of a tiny pet rabbit with a samurai’s gauntlet strapped to the miniature harness it was wearing too the feeling of unreality to an entirely different level.

took the feeling of unreality

chapter 3

“Speak for yourself. I saw the bill the last time she did this.” Ei-chan held both of her hands up as thought to ward off the expense. Given her own slender - the unkind would and have said ‘rail thin’ - figure, she had cause for her horror.

“Outa-san,” izuna said, and held up her cell phone to show its ‘no signal’ warning, “Does your radio have reception?”

Izuna

“More than you!” she snapped back over her shoulder. Eiko had stumbled over a severed leg, distracted by the screaming as the monster-woman tore at the guards with superhuman strength and fingers that ended in kitchen knives; Izuna yanked her back on balance and dragged her behind her. Nadeshiko had the door to the small shop’s stock room open, and they poured through it, Nadeshiko, hanabi glancing over her shoulder, then Izuna, dragging Eiko, and finally Outa-san slammed the door behind them.

Hanabi

Hanabi squeaked loudly enough from the shock to provoke a fit of screeching and banging from the monster at the door, and Izuna whipped around with her hands raised in an automatic empty-hand stance even as Outa-san’s gone came up, tracking towards...

gun

Or maybe Gonne? Smile

“Very well,” she said, and carefully, began to draw the blade. It was tricky - the quarters were cramped, and for some reason her father had thought it was a good idea to give her a massive nodachi as long as she was tall, rather a more conventional blade.

rather than a more

And then she thought a little more about thirty centimeters from the hilt, and blinked. “An homage to the Worochi-no-Aramasa?” she asked, fighting to think through the frisson of awe. That famous blade had been in the ancient tsurugi style, straight and double-edged, rather than the single-edged and slightly curved modern form that the nodachi was extended from.

First and last sentences bother me a little. Extended and thought seem like the wrong verbs somehow. I guess part of this is that the later expansion didn't make it into the text I was taking notes off of.

She resheathed the blade even more gingerly than she had drawn it, finally feeling just as croggled as her friends looked. “I think,” she said shakily, “that you had better tell me everything.”

I'd guess boggled rather than croggled

chapter 4

“Isn’t the time? Just like it’s never been the time to know anything, no matter how trivial?” She glared, years worth of words finally tumbling out. “There’s a hell of a lot of difference between keeping ‘Oh, hey, you’re a demigoddes’ under your hat and making half of everything I am into a total blank spot!”

demigoddess

“...It makes sense for her, since she said her mom always made jokes about her dad bein’ who he turns out ta be,” she finished, “but Sunshin an’ I never had a clue, and we still got prime names that turn out to be ban on and run into each other and hang out? Plus the way the crow and snake show up right on time?”

Sunshine bang

Izuna couldn’t really blame her for being in favor of more safety, not when the girl had looked green enough that her usual reaction for wanting to take a pretty girl in her arms hadn’t perked itself back into her consciousness until after her (cousin, dammit!) friend had started to cheer up.

maybe reason instead of reaction?

Is the policeman zombie in chapter one a Yasunori Kato cognate?
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I hadn't been keeping up with this one before, having just read through the gamebooks at the time and gotten thoroughly annoyed by them putting Prometheus (one of the few mythological figures to have my actual unqualified respect) on the villian side, and the stealth villain conspiracy side, and made the only way to get the character I'd want to play be to have him somehow interfere and semicoopt a scion of Liberty or vice versa.

That and the evil Loki instead of trickster god of bards and law.

Having
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actually read it now, of course, all that is largely irrelevant, but combined with my general dislike of White Wolf's games to begin with it kept me away from Scion materials until lack-of-feedback-guilt for what passes for a freind on the internet's writing dragged me in, and I have to say I was missing out. All the comments I thought to make have been said by others, but I'll happily join the chorus calling for more.
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