I see what you mean by 27 hit combo, I think they all hit the funny bone. Sakura decended from a FLCL character? Now that I think of it, it makes perfect sense...
Overall: Very nice, but many annoying typos.
Tsunade stopped pacing, though her hans continued to worry each other until she stood behind her chair, gripping the back to occupy them.
hans -> hands
In no time at all,
it seemed, the trio had left the office and were walking throguh the streets of the city, pondering their next move.
it's odd to put a newline in the middle of a sentence.
Mischievious golden eyes sparkled with humor over a toothy grin as she enjoyed the effect she had on them, even as she pulled opff her oven mitts and fodled the quilt that had been warming the loves just put in the oven while they rose.
a few mispelling in here.
and the pale shaodow of the moon gained substance in the darkening sky.
Drogn's might have shaodow, but the moon has a shadow
"You'll jhave to be careful, nya.
jhave -> have
swweatdrops -> double u does not mean using w twice![[Image: smile.gif]](http://www.ezboard.com/intl/aenglish/images/emoticons/smile.gif)
cl8inging ... you know there is this thing known as a spell chacker. I'll just leave the other errors for now.
E: "Did they... did they just endorse the combination of the JSDF and US Army by showing them as two lesbian lolicons moving in together and holding hands and talking about how 'intimate' they were?"
B: "Have you forgotten so soon? They're phasing out Don't Ask, Don't Tell."
Overall: Very nice, but many annoying typos.
Tsunade stopped pacing, though her hans continued to worry each other until she stood behind her chair, gripping the back to occupy them.
hans -> hands
In no time at all,
it seemed, the trio had left the office and were walking throguh the streets of the city, pondering their next move.
it's odd to put a newline in the middle of a sentence.
Mischievious golden eyes sparkled with humor over a toothy grin as she enjoyed the effect she had on them, even as she pulled opff her oven mitts and fodled the quilt that had been warming the loves just put in the oven while they rose.
a few mispelling in here.
and the pale shaodow of the moon gained substance in the darkening sky.
Drogn's might have shaodow, but the moon has a shadow
"You'll jhave to be careful, nya.
jhave -> have
swweatdrops -> double u does not mean using w twice
cl8inging ... you know there is this thing known as a spell chacker. I'll just leave the other errors for now.
E: "Did they... did they just endorse the combination of the JSDF and US Army by showing them as two lesbian lolicons moving in together and holding hands and talking about how 'intimate' they were?"
B: "Have you forgotten so soon? They're phasing out Don't Ask, Don't Tell."