Quote:This is actually something that I gave a bit of thought about, but now I'm gonna have to go and check to see if my understanding of the definition of the word 'weight' is correct.
since she figuratively weighed nothing,
literality not figurativly.
You see, the thing is, even though she 'weighs' nothing, she still has mass. It's like, say you were in a space station with no gravity and you threw a baseball at someone's head. The baseball may not 'weigh' anything, but it sure as hell's gonna smart when it hits the other guy in the head.
As for the character, yeah, he is American. He's actually me, which, IMHO, makes him not simply 'American' but Tejano-American. ^_^;;
Thing is, she has to be naked - tissue regeneration is basicly an unusual technology where anything that gets in the way, like a bandage or a peice of cloth, might accidently be made part of the healed skin. Not very pleasant.
The bio-bed is fully automated - very handy on these small ships where you might be the only person that can help yourself. Ergo, all she has to do is lay there while the medical computer takes care of the business it's been programmed to handle. It's pretty much fool proof (not to be confused with being proof against someone stupid enough to tamper with the computer).
So, I have scruples. At the very least, I would turn around and wait while business is taken care of.
Thanks, I will do my best to keep this up.
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Well, Sirrocco, there will be times that I feel my work requires such deep criticism as to be thoroughly edited. If you'd like, you're more than welcome when I feel that I got something that's ready for 'post-production.' Beta readers and spell checkers are wonderful things... But a clear and concise editor is a precious gem. ^_^
Quote:Gah! I see what's wrong there! It should be past tense like you wrote it. Thanks!
This may be local variation, but the line sounds a little odd to me. I've always heart this as "who couldn't have been more than..."
Quote:You're right. I'll go ahead and fix that.
This is a *very* small nit, but sentences like this flow a bit better if the parallel is cleaner. Maybe something more like "days under a harsh, unforgiving sun and nights spent cold and exposed." It's the days [foo] and nights [foo] rather than days [foo] and [foo] nights.
Quote:I'll reveiw that, but given what you said, I think I might snip that bit altogether. At the very least I'll reword it.
This is awkward and strange. The sentence isn't really well constructed. Yes, having her face healed is a good thing, but it should be pretty obvious that it's not the end of her troubles.
Quote:Thanks. It's an interesting thought: I am writing the memoirs of my alternate self as he looks back on a very interesting life. Best of all, he started out where I am now. (You may now crack MGS Time Paradox jokes.) Anywho, yeah... It does give opportunities for me to kinda step out and do stuff like that and I think I'll be doing it a little more often. Not so much that people get tired of seeing it. ^_^;;
This is a really cool line. That instant of bending the rules and stepping momentarily out of the second-order narrative into the first really works.
Anyhow, it could be a bit better. Lemme tweak it and see what happens. As for Manticores having tear ducts...
MANTICORE ANTOMY 101
Today's Subject: The Head
The head of a Manticore is a remarkable work of biomechanics and bioengineering. Like the rest of a Manticore's endoskeleton, the skull is a monomolecular construct - hideously expensive to make, but the end result is very much worth the cost: a virtually indestructable framework that is more than capable of handling the day-to-day stress of combat with no maintenance whatsoever.
Another advantage is that the nanofacturing process allows for an infinite degree of flexibility in shape and form. Thus, when a subject undergoes the process of becoming a Manticore, their original skull is used as a template so that their physical appearance and voice patterns can be preserved.
The skull itself actually comes in several peices so that in the unlikely event of a brain hemorage, an emergency operation can be performed to save the soldier's life. This is the only and greatest vulnerability in the entire endoskelatal construct and the reason why all Manticores must where protective head gear in combat.
Once the subject's brain has been fully installed into it's new skull (usually the rest of the cyborg body is already assembled as well), it is emersed in a bio-regen tank where human flesh, based on the subjects own genetic fingerprint, is grown over the construct. While analogues to the eyes and the musculoskeletal system are already provided, this final step adds useful features such as the soldier's original face, sense of touch, sense of smell and taste (both heightened), as well as seemingly little things like tear glands and ducts and mucose membranes. Even the scalp, complete with hair folocles, is regrown.
This all culminates to an unprecidented level of biomimetics that is rivaled only by bioandroids recently found in alternate parallel plains. It is especially good for Project MANTICORE II subjects as it provides a link to their own humanity.
*END*
That informative enough? ^_^
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