Just a quick thing.
"Dear Journal" might not be the best way to start, as it makes him sound morel like a twelve year old girl or Doug Funny then a warrant officer in a space navy. A simple date and location might be better suited.---------------
-Jon
Being the Mariner hitting coach is like being the Defense Against the Dark Arts teacher at Hogwarts.
-Poster on USSMariner.com
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Jon
"And that must have caused my dad's brain to break in half, replaced by a purely mechanical engine of revenge!"
"Dear Journal" might not be the best way to start, as it makes him sound morel like a twelve year old girl or Doug Funny then a warrant officer in a space navy. A simple date and location might be better suited.---------------
-Jon
Being the Mariner hitting coach is like being the Defense Against the Dark Arts teacher at Hogwarts.
-Poster on USSMariner.com
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Jon
"And that must have caused my dad's brain to break in half, replaced by a purely mechanical engine of revenge!"