Hm. I'll consider that. Given that part of this is already 'riding' Naruto's PoV, a little more interior monologue from Naruto probably would help. Yeah.
The danger in that, of course, is I could go even further wrong. Hm.
*neck-crick* I'll probably try and spin one of the second chapter bits from Naruto's perspective...on balance, that might even things out.
Inner Sakura...well, the lack of emphasis is, in part, a deliberate decision. See, there's a lot of fanfics that turn the whole Inner Sakura thing into an actual split personality...or a bloodline ability or something. I'm not against the idea, but it's not a path I wanna walk down.
So I'm treating Sakura a lot more as an integrated whole - 'Inner' is just, y'know, the part of her that yells crap in the privacy of her own mind. The implication being that she's got a lot more aggression than she usually shows. I think that's a fair take.
-- Acyl
The danger in that, of course, is I could go even further wrong. Hm.
*neck-crick* I'll probably try and spin one of the second chapter bits from Naruto's perspective...on balance, that might even things out.
Inner Sakura...well, the lack of emphasis is, in part, a deliberate decision. See, there's a lot of fanfics that turn the whole Inner Sakura thing into an actual split personality...or a bloodline ability or something. I'm not against the idea, but it's not a path I wanna walk down.
So I'm treating Sakura a lot more as an integrated whole - 'Inner' is just, y'know, the part of her that yells crap in the privacy of her own mind. The implication being that she's got a lot more aggression than she usually shows. I think that's a fair take.
-- Acyl