Quote:Spelling mistake aside, this is actually poor English. The original is better because it doesn't separate the noun from the verb. It's not actually incorrect to do it either way, but the sentence is stronger with the adjective after the verb.[/quote]Stronger perhaps, but it sounds awkward as all get-out, to me at least. Of course, I said at the beginning that someof the suggestions were only my own opinion of ways that sounded better rather than neccessarily being more technically correct, and everyone's idea of awkward will be slightly different.Quote:
"breifly ab
The spelling... I probably tripped over IE again, yes? There's a saying about that - "I before E except after C, or when sounding like A as in neighbor and weigh, and on weekends and holidays, and all through out May, and you'll always be wrong no matter what you say." While the first two assertions are perhaps more technically useful, it's the last I find myself drawing on most often, and which make the whole thing stick in memory. Kind of the thing about the planets - Man very early made jars stand up neary perpendicular - that lists the first letter of each planet in order out from the sun, or for resistor color coding, Bad boy rape our young girls, but violet gives willingly - that list the first letters of the colors from 0-9 (black brown red orange yellow green blue violet white) to read off the ohm rating.
But I still am not getting back to the second half of the part, blast it. Lots of other capable folk here, though, and I did read it through - a nice beginning, for as far as it goes, as mentioned above.
- CDSERVO: Loook *deeeeply* into my eyes... Tell me, what do you see?
CROW: (hypnotized) A twisted man who wants to inflict his pain upon others.
A kung-fu nun in a leather thong was no less extreme than anything else he had seen that day. - Rev. Dark's IST: Holy Sea World
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"Anko, what you do in your free time is your own choice. Use it wisely. And if you do not use it wisely, make sure you thoroughly enjoy whatever unwise thing you are doing." - HymnOfRagnorok as Orochimaru at SpaceBattles
woot Med. Eng., verb, 1st & 3rd pers. prsnt. sg. know, knows