two things...
- first, with rumored ties to a necromantic cult, an unwillingness to accept that the enemy might be a threat, and deliberately ignoring potentially useful tactics, I honestly thought that Lord Haart might be getting ready to betray them all.
- second, it's well enough written, but I would suggest maybe not worrying so much about explicitly dragging out bits of characterization. Just know what the charcterization is, and let it come out naturally.
- first, with rumored ties to a necromantic cult, an unwillingness to accept that the enemy might be a threat, and deliberately ignoring potentially useful tactics, I honestly thought that Lord Haart might be getting ready to betray them all.
- second, it's well enough written, but I would suggest maybe not worrying so much about explicitly dragging out bits of characterization. Just know what the charcterization is, and let it come out naturally.