Hollow, an example of bad writing.

[Elsa Bibat]

I agree with Necratoid's points - I was going to chime in the original thread and saw this here.
In simple words: it does not suspend disbelief - which is what any good story does.
Also, it has a pretty stupid opener - too fast, too simple and too easy - all about tell and not show. Just 'coolness' shots without the underlying background.
I'm really curious on what makes this was a fic to recommend.