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284 is enough - NEW new fic rec thread
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I read it. I'm not sure why, but I think I was just...morbidly fascinated by the concept. Christian Spider-Man meets Ranma? I had to see this. Ended up skimming most of it.
The writing isn't actually bad, for the most part. That is, the author's got decent spelling and grammar. More importantly, his sentence structure doesn't make my head spin. And I'm pretty fussy about such things. There's some stuff that's been recommended here, and still tracked on the updates list, that I simply can't read...I find the language too stilted, or whatever. This guy, well, he's at least got a fair grasp of the basic mechanics of writing.
That said, this story annoys me for other reasons. I think the real issue is one of narrative flow at a macro level. He has some justification for all the Christian themes he brings in, but I don't think he handles it right. Too heavy-handed. It might actually work if he were more subtle. Hell, it ain't just the Christian stuff, really. 's kinda a problem with everything in the story. The ideas aren't so bad, they're just not...executed well.
-- Acyl


Messages In This Thread
Re: 284 is enough - NEW new fic rec thread - by HoagieOfDoom - 01-05-2006, 01:08 AM
Wellllllll... - by Valles - 01-05-2006, 07:28 PM
Re: Shake Me - by Bob Schroeck - 01-05-2006, 10:04 PM
Re: Wellllllll... - by Bob Schroeck - 01-05-2006, 10:07 PM
What is up with FF.net now? - by Bob Schroeck - 01-05-2006, 10:09 PM
Re: What is up with FF.net now? - by Star Ranger4 - 01-05-2006, 10:42 PM
Re: What is up with FF.net now? - by jpub - 01-05-2006, 11:19 PM
ff.net and ads - by Logan Darklighter - 01-06-2006, 02:02 AM
Fics - by Florin - 01-06-2006, 02:03 AM
Re: Fics - by VladimirTherin - 01-07-2006, 05:23 PM
Re: Fics - by HoagieOfDoom - 01-09-2006, 11:06 PM
Re: Fics - by Disruptor - 01-10-2006, 02:26 AM
Re: Fics - by Bob Schroeck - 01-10-2006, 05:00 PM
Re: Fics - by jpub - 01-10-2006, 09:03 PM
Re: Fics - by jpub - 01-11-2006, 05:26 AM
Re: Fics - by Disruptor - 01-12-2006, 03:08 AM
Re: Fics - by Aleh - 01-12-2006, 06:49 AM
Re: Fics - by HoagieOfDoom - 01-12-2006, 10:20 PM
Re: Fics - by Angryoptimist - 01-13-2006, 02:05 PM
Re: Fics - by Aleh - 01-15-2006, 09:09 AM
Super-Harry - by Darwithe - 01-16-2006, 09:38 AM
Re: Super-Harry - by Bob Schroeck - 01-16-2006, 05:13 PM
Re: Year in the Life - by drakensis - 01-19-2006, 03:37 AM
Re: Year in the Life - by jpub - 01-19-2006, 03:46 AM
more liz_marcs - by katreus - 01-20-2006, 11:50 AM
Whoops - by hmelton - 01-21-2006, 04:44 AM
True Angel - by drakensis - 01-22-2006, 02:01 PM
Re: True Angel - by ClassicDrogn - 01-22-2006, 10:34 PM
Re: True Angel - by HoagieOfDoom - 01-22-2006, 11:41 PM
Re: True Angel - by katreus - 01-23-2006, 06:19 AM
//\//\//\//\ - by mrfix186 - 01-23-2006, 09:32 PM
Re: True Angel - by ClassicDrogn - 01-24-2006, 01:48 PM
Re: True Angel - by katreus - 01-24-2006, 09:38 PM
Re: True Angel - by ECSNorway - 01-25-2006, 07:00 PM
... - by jpub - 01-26-2006, 03:19 AM
"Silent High" - by Angryoptimist - 01-26-2006, 05:28 AM
Re: ... - by ClassicDrogn - 01-26-2006, 01:11 PM
surprisingly ... - by Rieverre - 01-26-2006, 04:57 PM
These Dreams - by HoagieOfDoom - 01-26-2006, 06:25 PM
Re: These Dreams - by VladimirTherin - 01-26-2006, 08:30 PM
Re: These Dreams - by Deadpan29 - 01-26-2006, 08:38 PM
Re: These Dreams - by jpub - 01-26-2006, 08:55 PM
Re: These Dreams - by Disruptor - 01-27-2006, 12:25 AM
Re: These Dreams - by Ebony - 01-27-2006, 01:52 AM
Re: These Dreams - by katreus - 01-28-2006, 09:04 AM
Re: These Dreams - by VladimirTherin - 01-28-2006, 01:36 PM
tis hilarious - by Rieverre - 01-29-2006, 04:22 AM
A different take - by ClassicDrogn - 01-30-2006, 12:46 PM
Re: A different take - by happerry - 01-30-2006, 10:58 PM
Re: A different take - by jpub - 01-31-2006, 05:08 AM
Re: A different take - by happerry - 02-01-2006, 10:21 AM
Re: A different take - by katreus - 02-01-2006, 10:52 AM
Re: A different take - by happerry - 02-01-2006, 09:24 PM
Re: A different take - by katreus - 02-01-2006, 09:47 PM
Re: A different take - by Bob Schroeck - 02-02-2006, 03:17 AM
Re: A different take - by Valles - 02-03-2006, 08:05 AM
Re: A different take - by Bob Schroeck - 02-03-2006, 05:15 PM
Re: A different take - by VladimirTherin - 02-04-2006, 10:16 AM
Re: Mai Harem - by Rieverre - 02-04-2006, 02:17 PM
Re: Mai Harem - by Valles - 02-04-2006, 07:08 PM
First fanfic - by hmelton - 02-04-2006, 08:13 PM
Re: A different take - by Bob Schroeck - 02-04-2006, 09:04 PM
Re: A different take - by Aleh - 02-05-2006, 04:58 AM
Re: A different take - by Bob Schroeck - 02-05-2006, 06:33 AM
Old soldiers - by Deadpan29 - 02-05-2006, 07:48 AM
Shinji and PenPens Big Adventure - by drakensis - 02-05-2006, 02:07 PM
naruto fic - by mrfix186 - 02-08-2006, 09:34 AM
Re: naruto fic - by VladimirTherin - 02-08-2006, 05:19 PM
New fanficauthors.net - by jpub - 02-10-2006, 09:02 AM
The Right Technology - by hmelton - 02-12-2006, 12:34 AM
Re: The Right Technology - by Bob Schroeck - 02-13-2006, 06:14 PM
Re: The Right Technology - by ClassicDrogn - 02-13-2006, 09:23 PM
Re: The Right Technology - by Bob Schroeck - 02-13-2006, 09:58 PM
Re: Crossover - by Darwithe - 02-15-2006, 12:02 AM
Between a rock and... - by HoagieOfDoom - 02-15-2006, 08:18 AM
Small Dimensional Crisis - by happerry - 02-15-2006, 09:11 PM
Re: Small Dimensional Crisis - by Bob Schroeck - 02-15-2006, 10:10 PM
Re: Between a rock and... - by sweno - 02-16-2006, 05:35 AM
No Good Deed - by WengFook - 02-16-2006, 06:09 AM
Far Beyond Normal - by RMH999 - 02-16-2006, 06:32 AM
Re: Far Beyond Normal - by Bob Schroeck - 02-16-2006, 09:56 PM
Re: Between a rock and... - by Bob Schroeck - 02-16-2006, 09:57 PM
Re: Between a rock and... - by jpub - 02-16-2006, 11:40 PM
Upon a Fiery Steed - by SkyeFire - 02-27-2006, 05:53 AM
Re: Upon a Fiery Steed - by katreus - 02-27-2006, 06:09 AM
Re: Upon a Fiery Steed - by M Fnord - 02-27-2006, 07:03 AM
Re: Upon a Fiery Steed - by ClassicDrogn - 02-27-2006, 07:25 AM
Re: Upon a Fiery Steed - by VladimirTherin - 02-27-2006, 08:15 AM
Re: Upon a Fiery Steed - by drakensis - 02-27-2006, 12:35 PM
Re: Upon a Fiery Steed - by ClassicDrogn - 02-27-2006, 01:13 PM
A Lois & Clark Fanfic - by hmelton - 02-28-2006, 06:49 AM
Read it for the articles... - by ClassicDrogn - 03-01-2006, 11:31 AM
Datum of Random Silliness +3 - by ECSNorway - 03-01-2006, 06:11 PM
Re: 284 is enough - NEW new fic rec thread - by WengFook - 03-03-2006, 05:56 AM
Fields of Iron - by hmelton - 03-04-2006, 05:31 AM
Fission - by werehawk - 03-07-2006, 07:36 AM
Re: Fission - by Kheram Coldstar - 03-08-2006, 04:27 AM
Re: Fission - by ECSNorway - 03-08-2006, 07:07 AM
Re: Sufficiently Advanced Technology - by WengFook - 03-09-2006, 05:30 AM
Re: Sufficiently Advanced Technology - by jpub - 03-09-2006, 07:35 AM
Re: Sufficiently Advanced Technology - by WengFook - 03-09-2006, 12:19 PM
new dark scribler - by Logan Darklighter - 03-10-2006, 07:33 AM
Another Story - by ECSNorway - 03-11-2006, 04:56 AM
Re: Another Story - by Aleh - 03-11-2006, 08:04 PM
Re: Another Story - by Aleh - 03-11-2006, 11:54 PM
Baeraad - by kentmagus - 03-13-2006, 09:08 AM
Re: Baeraad - by Evil Midnight Lurker - 03-15-2006, 03:07 AM
Re: Re: Baeraad - by kentmagus - 03-15-2006, 08:38 AM
Re: Baeraad - by Bob Schroeck - 03-15-2006, 05:04 PM
Re: 284 is enough - NEW new fic rec thread - by Elsa Bibat - 03-16-2006, 05:15 PM
Re: Inevitable by Mhalachai - by Xenoproctologist - 03-17-2006, 12:08 PM
The Assitant. - by Jinx999 - 03-21-2006, 12:24 PM
A new BtVS fic I've posted on my LJ - by jpub - 03-30-2006, 10:38 AM
C. S. Lewis Fic - by happerry - 03-31-2006, 07:21 AM
Edenfalling - by Valles - 03-31-2006, 08:05 AM
Unlikely Heroes - by happerry - 03-31-2006, 11:45 PM
Re: 284 is enough - NEW new fic rec thread - by Elsa Bibat - 04-01-2006, 11:18 AM
The Devil Is In The Details... - by hmelton - 04-02-2006, 01:50 AM
Garden of Sanctuary - by WengFook - 04-05-2006, 09:43 AM
A Year Like No Other - by Sirrocco - 04-08-2006, 06:13 AM
Interesting Firefly/BSG fic - by Zojojojo - 04-08-2006, 05:02 PM
Re: The Birthday Present - by Custos Sophiae - 04-13-2006, 10:42 PM
Re: The Birthday Present - by jpub - 04-14-2006, 06:50 AM
Re: The Birthday Present - by Bob Schroeck - 04-14-2006, 02:00 PM
Re: Hollow - by happerry - 04-14-2006, 07:28 PM
Re: Hollow - by Necratoid - 04-15-2006, 06:01 AM
Re: Hollow - by happerry - 04-15-2006, 09:14 AM
Re: Hollow - by jpub - 04-15-2006, 03:39 PM
Re: The Birthday Present - by Duane Peters - 04-16-2006, 06:13 AM
Re: The Birthday Present - by Aleh - 04-18-2006, 01:12 AM
Re: The Birthday Present - by Aleh - 04-18-2006, 03:16 PM
Firefly/Riddick story - by Zojojojo - 04-19-2006, 01:46 PM
Re: Firefly/Riddick story - by WengFook - 04-20-2006, 09:17 AM
expanded capacity for verbiage - by Foxboy - 04-23-2006, 04:48 PM
Re: expanded capacity for verbiage - by Aleh - 04-23-2006, 07:14 PM
The Gods of ArrKelaan - by happerry - 04-24-2006, 07:49 PM
New Anita Blake crossover - by ECSNorway - 04-30-2006, 06:29 PM
? - by HoagieOfDoom - 04-30-2006, 07:09 PM
Re: New Anita Blake crossover - by Norgarth - 04-30-2006, 07:29 PM
Semireccomended - by ClassicDrogn - 05-01-2006, 06:42 AM
Re: Semireccomended - by WengFook - 05-02-2006, 07:29 AM
Re: Semireccomended - by ClassicDrogn - 05-02-2006, 09:25 PM
Re: Semireccomended - by Acyl - 05-03-2006, 06:12 AM
Re: Semireccomended - by Aleh - 05-03-2006, 01:36 PM
Re: Beast Lord - by Bob Schroeck - 05-03-2006, 01:53 PM
Re: Beast Lord - by Aleh - 05-03-2006, 07:46 PM
Re: Beast Lord - by Bob Schroeck - 05-04-2006, 01:50 PM
An Utterly Original HP fic - by Bob Schroeck - 05-06-2006, 03:15 AM
Re: An Utterly Original HP fic - by Stephen Mann - 05-07-2006, 08:16 PM
I am ph1ll3d with ph33r - by ClassicDrogn - 05-08-2006, 10:48 AM
Odd pairing - by Luca Nicolai - 05-08-2006, 04:29 PM
Re: Odd pairing - by jpub - 05-08-2006, 07:09 PM
Re: Odd pairing - by ClassicDrogn - 05-08-2006, 07:10 PM
Re: Odd pairing - by ECSNorway - 05-08-2006, 07:26 PM
Re: Odd pairing - by Custos Sophiae - 05-08-2006, 08:20 PM
Stargate HP-1 - by ECSNorway - 05-08-2006, 10:42 PM
Re: Stargate HP-1 - by WengFook - 05-09-2006, 04:21 AM
Re: Stargate HP-1 - by drakensis - 05-09-2006, 01:41 PM
Thanks - by Luca Nicolai - 05-09-2006, 02:45 PM
Re: Thanks - by katreus - 05-10-2006, 02:43 AM
Azumanga Daioh IN SPACE! - by drakensis - 05-10-2006, 01:03 PM
Re: Azumanga Daioh IN SPACE! - by WengFook - 05-11-2006, 03:23 AM
Re: Azumanga Daioh IN SPACE! - by Soutern Cross - 05-11-2006, 01:23 PM
Naruto time travel... - by Feinan - 05-14-2006, 06:23 AM
Penguingate - by Aleh - 05-15-2006, 07:01 PM
Re: Penguingate - by Bob Schroeck - 05-15-2006, 07:02 PM
Penguingate - by Rieverre - 05-15-2006, 07:18 PM
Re: Penguingate - by Aleh - 05-15-2006, 07:32 PM
Re: Penguingate - by Rieverre - 05-15-2006, 07:37 PM
Re: Bubblegum Crisis: A Story of Tokyo 1880 - by HoagieOfDoom - 05-17-2006, 05:56 AM
A "Firefly" Drabble - by Bob Schroeck - 05-18-2006, 05:44 AM
Re: A "Firefly" Drabble - by katreus - 05-19-2006, 12:44 AM
Re: Naruto Berserk - by Berk - 05-19-2006, 03:32 PM
Re: Naruto: Berserk - by Angryoptimist - 05-19-2006, 09:38 PM
try this, then - by Rieverre - 05-19-2006, 09:48 PM
Re: Harry Potter/Buffy Crossover Fic - by jpub - 05-20-2006, 03:18 AM
Re: try this, then (Full Metal Berserker) - by Angryoptimist - 05-20-2006, 07:25 AM
Re: try this, then (Full Metal Berserker) - by HoagieOfDoom - 05-21-2006, 07:46 AM
Re: try this, then (Full Metal Berserker) - by The Hunterminator - 05-21-2006, 11:16 PM
Re: try this, then (Full Metal Berserker) - by WengFook - 05-22-2006, 04:47 AM
Re: try this, then (Full Metal Berserker) - by HoagieOfDoom - 05-25-2006, 05:17 AM
Memorial Day Fic - by Periwinkle Skyye - 05-26-2006, 05:54 PM
A New Fic by ME! - by drakensis - 05-27-2006, 06:34 PM
Lost Time - by drakensis - 05-29-2006, 06:30 AM
re: a new fic - by VladimirTherin - 05-29-2006, 06:45 AM
Re: re: a new fic - by jpub - 05-29-2006, 09:45 AM
Re: re: a new fic - by katreus - 05-30-2006, 06:46 AM
Re: Lost Time - by ECSNorway - 05-30-2006, 09:40 PM
New HP Short fic - by Bob Schroeck - 05-31-2006, 02:26 PM
Lilly? - by Valles - 06-05-2006, 04:41 AM
spider-man - by katreus - 06-05-2006, 07:43 PM
Re: spider-man - by WengFook - 06-06-2006, 03:50 AM
bsg/west wing - by katreus - 06-06-2006, 03:52 AM
ShadoeFox - by happerry - 06-09-2006, 01:22 AM
Inuyasha - by Valles - 06-14-2006, 05:16 PM
Inevitable has a .... - by Zojojojo - 06-14-2006, 10:08 PM
Chapter 50 of "Make A Wish" posted - by bmull - 06-18-2006, 02:24 AM
Re: Chapter 50 of "Make A Wish" posted - by Necratoid - 06-18-2006, 03:40 AM
Re: Chapter 50 of "Make A Wish" posted - by jpub - 06-18-2006, 05:15 AM
Re: Chapter 50 of "Make A Wish" posted - by bmull - 06-18-2006, 01:52 PM
New from AlbertG - by ECSNorway - 07-06-2006, 03:23 PM
Re: New from AlbertG - by ECSNorway - 07-06-2006, 03:29 PM
Re: New from AlbertG - by ECSNorway - 07-06-2006, 04:26 PM
new story - by Logan Darklighter - 07-07-2006, 05:32 AM
re: "Maggie" - by Foxboy - 07-07-2006, 09:14 AM
Re: re: "Maggie" - by Bob Schroeck - 07-07-2006, 01:51 PM
New Rorschach's Blot - by Bob Schroeck - 07-07-2006, 02:32 PM
Re: New Rorschach's Blot - by Necratoid - 07-10-2006, 05:28 AM
Re: re: "Maggie" - by ClassicDrogn - 07-11-2006, 12:14 PM
Re: re: "Maggie" - by Bob Schroeck - 07-11-2006, 02:16 PM

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