I read it. I'm not sure why, but I think I was just...morbidly fascinated by the concept. Christian Spider-Man meets Ranma? I had to see this. Ended up skimming most of it.
The writing isn't actually bad, for the most part. That is, the author's got decent spelling and grammar. More importantly, his sentence structure doesn't make my head spin. And I'm pretty fussy about such things. There's some stuff that's been recommended here, and still tracked on the updates list, that I simply can't read...I find the language too stilted, or whatever. This guy, well, he's at least got a fair grasp of the basic mechanics of writing.
That said, this story annoys me for other reasons. I think the real issue is one of narrative flow at a macro level. He has some justification for all the Christian themes he brings in, but I don't think he handles it right. Too heavy-handed. It might actually work if he were more subtle. Hell, it ain't just the Christian stuff, really. 's kinda a problem with everything in the story. The ideas aren't so bad, they're just not...executed well.
-- Acyl
The writing isn't actually bad, for the most part. That is, the author's got decent spelling and grammar. More importantly, his sentence structure doesn't make my head spin. And I'm pretty fussy about such things. There's some stuff that's been recommended here, and still tracked on the updates list, that I simply can't read...I find the language too stilted, or whatever. This guy, well, he's at least got a fair grasp of the basic mechanics of writing.
That said, this story annoys me for other reasons. I think the real issue is one of narrative flow at a macro level. He has some justification for all the Christian themes he brings in, but I don't think he handles it right. Too heavy-handed. It might actually work if he were more subtle. Hell, it ain't just the Christian stuff, really. 's kinda a problem with everything in the story. The ideas aren't so bad, they're just not...executed well.
-- Acyl