Quote:Who, Neshan? Pretty much what he's been teaching Genin!Sakura. And seal-reinforced plate armor.
Wow, can't even maintain a Byukugan but still can snap ribs. What the hell is inside your head guy?
Quote:Eh? wakarimasen...
Fudged wording.
Quote:Assuming he's as strong as he seems, then yeah, it would've.
One of the big events I was looking forward to seeing you alter was the Uchiha Massacre. I think you nailed it, as blatant change would have just had Itachi ice a lot more people besides the Uchiha.
Further deponent sayeth not.
Quote:I'm glad. I was a little worried that it'd seem like a cliche - the old 'walk in on the parents' joke - but it seems to've come off well.
Oh man, that's priceless. I feared for Iruka's soul and wondered when Anko would finally make her move. Naruto's gonna need the brain bleach.
A&I have some serious issues to work out, particularly having to do with their perceptions of themselves and each other,so this is by no means the end of that plotline. Unfortunately, I currently have no idea exactly what those issues are or how I'm going to handle them, so...
Ah, well. I'll work it out.
Quote:Yep. I don't think I can remember ever seeing what I'd call a good charictarization of Hiashi anywhere in the fandom - we're always caught between the repentant and loving father on one hand and the soulless, unfeeling tyrant on the other.
I completely buy this. Its not even a stretch in cannon for him to feel this way, he was pretty pissed off about how that whole thing went down and seemed resigned to his fate in a distrubingly similar way that Neji did pre-asswhupping.
Hm. Maybe desaix's...
Quote:You ain't seen nothin' yet. ^_^
She's getting scary. I love it.
Quote:w00t! Yeah! *dances madly* I'm writing about people!
Great chapter. You've really got the characterization of pretty much everybody down pat. Its really impressive. You don't let them be defined by their personality quirks like other fics do, but make them just that, quirks. Reading your stuff makes me want to go find my notebook with my drafts of the piece I started working on.
Thank you! I'm done with my last final, now (yes, finished it before nine in the morning), so stay tuned for the rest of Chapter 5 sometime later today before I pack up and start driving.
Ja, -n
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"V, did you do something foolish?"
"Yes, and it was glorious."