Tantalizing, intriguing, saddening...
More, please!
The only editorial comment I have to make is that you used "impart" twice in one sentence early on:
-- Bob
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It's a "magical" land. I think "magical" is ancient Greek for "pain in the butt". -- Bun-Bun, Sluggy Freelance, 11/9/03
More, please!
The only editorial comment I have to make is that you used "impart" twice in one sentence early on:
Quote:It detracts from the sentence.
The arrows he used were varied, but he most often used a blunt-tipped variety that acted like a taser or stun gun, imparting an electric shock in addition to the stunning force that they imparted on impact.
-- Bob
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It's a "magical" land. I think "magical" is ancient Greek for "pain in the butt". -- Bun-Bun, Sluggy Freelance, 11/9/03