Okay, my main concern was keeping continuity with GGG. But frankly, Ian, this is so freakin' good that I'm willing to rewrite that continuity to make it official if it's necessary.
Yes, let me repeat that: I'd like to make this the official sequel to DW2, in continuity with the rest of the Walk and its related stories.
That said, I have only one real quibble with the chapter: Hiroe wouldn't know Lisa calls herself "Sailor Loon". All that could be heard on the damaged audio track on the boomer logs is "Sail... oon." Very specifically, the first consonant of "Loon" is missing, deliberately so on the writing side because it was necessary to catalyze Madigan.
-- Bob
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Then the horns kicked in...
...and my shoes began to squeak.
Yes, let me repeat that: I'd like to make this the official sequel to DW2, in continuity with the rest of the Walk and its related stories.
That said, I have only one real quibble with the chapter: Hiroe wouldn't know Lisa calls herself "Sailor Loon". All that could be heard on the damaged audio track on the boomer logs is "Sail... oon." Very specifically, the first consonant of "Loon" is missing, deliberately so on the writing side because it was necessary to catalyze Madigan.
-- Bob
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Then the horns kicked in...
...and my shoes began to squeak.