Quote: DRAG0NFLIGHT wrote:
Hmm. I'll have to go through the Sylia / Sylvie section to see if it's misleading. It happens sometimes. You don't like putting in "she
said, the other one said, then she said again" on every line of dialogue. But that means sometimes when you're trying to break out of the repetition
that you take it too far. So I'll take a look again.
A useful trick to this is to insert activity between the dialogue. This has the dual effect both making the scene more visually interesting and or
identifying the speaker without having to use a lot of cumbersome "he said/she said" attributions.
"So what do you think?" Sylia said.
"I'm not certain." Sylvie tapped her fingers against the tabletop. "We can't act unless we're certain."
Sylia stood up and looked out the window. "We can't wait to be certain, is the problem."
"If you say so." Sylvie looked at the computer and frowned.
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