Sailor Moon isn't my favorite show so no comment in that direction, but I've got a nitpick or two for your story.
First I'll quote a line.
"The wind outside swirled and screamed at her, and the pressure of her speed was painful."
Personally I'd shoot the designer of this craft. If her Ship's speed through the atmosphere causes a noticable increase in internal cabin pressure then
something is fundamentally wrong with the design.
I think you were thinking of acceleration and the "gee" forces it is often measured in instead of the wind pressure you get from an open cockpit at a
high airspeed.
This leads to your second possible problem or nitpick, DISTANCE and travel time.
Nemesis is a hypothetical planet out beyond pluto so you must be talking about orbits that can be measured in light hours.
This literally means that it takes sunlight just over 6.83 hours to reach pluto's orbit and starting from Earth's orbit which only takes 93,000,000
miles off the trip. That by the way only knocks just under 500 seconds off those nearly 7 hours of travel time for the light beam.
I've read advice from fantasy writers that says the first thing you need to do when setting up a fantasy story is to create a very good map for your
fantasy world.
The same goes for a story that includes space travel you need to define your method of travel very carefully or it will come back to bite you badly creating
plot holes and often either forbidding you from using certain plot devices or forcing "stupidities" on your characters, societies and civilizations
to fit the plot and story line you have created.
Make sure you test your method of space travel with the main plots and major or critical episodes other wise you can end up essentially crippling entire
chapters or plots and subplots of your story with a poorly choosen travel methods.
Take the new Battlestar Galactica for example the writer who re-imaged it made a very poor choice in picking a no limits Jump drive concept, especially for the
types of plots and episodes that he has written. The jump drive with it's demonstrated abilities makes the Baltar and number six programming backdoor
plot meaningless and laughably stupid. The FTL jump capabilities and mass produced throw away nature of a cylon fighter craft makes it the ultimate guided
missile able to literally jump inside a starship or planetary crust allowing the detonation of a ship or city killer that will bypass all armour and defenses.
Personally I'd recommend you use some form or low energy non-inertial interplanetary near light speed drives for your
"swan", Something that keeps Usagi from feeling any form of acceleration and doesn't actually "push" the ship to actual high inertial
speeds, just makes it appear to travel at high inertial speeds.
Remember inertial or real world speed can be said to be the ultimate weapon and if your ship's drive keeps inertia in the loop then you must remember that
her ship will become a potential weapon that will dwarf the largest fusion bombs and even dinosaur killer asteroids. It will also mean what ever her ship
strikes, even a invisibly small grain of dust will be creating forces beyond the levels of most atomic weapons.
There are solutions and designs of FTL that side step the issues with a "handwave" and these work even more so for a "magic" universe like
Sailor Moon.
Take for instance the jump drive mentioned above for nBSG had the writer simply made it impossible for the show's jump
drive to jump within a set distance of a magnetic field above a certain intensity then he wouldn't have had the "Stupidities" and plot holes that
started to shine forth in the first 30 minutes of the series. Gravity or curvature of space is another possible limiting device, but it has less flexable than
using the idea of magnetic fields.(Cutting or disrupting the gravity of a planet would be a even more powerful weapon, why bother with jumping fire crackers
into the planet when all you have to do is point a gravity nullifier at the world and watch it shed continents into deep space.)
As I said just a couple of nitpicks, I'm still reading this which is saying something for a pure Sailor Moon fanfic, I really don't like sailor moon.
Anyway I hope I helped and didn't hinder
howard melton
God bless
First I'll quote a line.
"The wind outside swirled and screamed at her, and the pressure of her speed was painful."
Personally I'd shoot the designer of this craft. If her Ship's speed through the atmosphere causes a noticable increase in internal cabin pressure then
something is fundamentally wrong with the design.
I think you were thinking of acceleration and the "gee" forces it is often measured in instead of the wind pressure you get from an open cockpit at a
high airspeed.
This leads to your second possible problem or nitpick, DISTANCE and travel time.
Nemesis is a hypothetical planet out beyond pluto so you must be talking about orbits that can be measured in light hours.
This literally means that it takes sunlight just over 6.83 hours to reach pluto's orbit and starting from Earth's orbit which only takes 93,000,000
miles off the trip. That by the way only knocks just under 500 seconds off those nearly 7 hours of travel time for the light beam.
I've read advice from fantasy writers that says the first thing you need to do when setting up a fantasy story is to create a very good map for your
fantasy world.
The same goes for a story that includes space travel you need to define your method of travel very carefully or it will come back to bite you badly creating
plot holes and often either forbidding you from using certain plot devices or forcing "stupidities" on your characters, societies and civilizations
to fit the plot and story line you have created.
Make sure you test your method of space travel with the main plots and major or critical episodes other wise you can end up essentially crippling entire
chapters or plots and subplots of your story with a poorly choosen travel methods.
Take the new Battlestar Galactica for example the writer who re-imaged it made a very poor choice in picking a no limits Jump drive concept, especially for the
types of plots and episodes that he has written. The jump drive with it's demonstrated abilities makes the Baltar and number six programming backdoor
plot meaningless and laughably stupid. The FTL jump capabilities and mass produced throw away nature of a cylon fighter craft makes it the ultimate guided
missile able to literally jump inside a starship or planetary crust allowing the detonation of a ship or city killer that will bypass all armour and defenses.
Personally I'd recommend you use some form or low energy non-inertial interplanetary near light speed drives for your
"swan", Something that keeps Usagi from feeling any form of acceleration and doesn't actually "push" the ship to actual high inertial
speeds, just makes it appear to travel at high inertial speeds.
Remember inertial or real world speed can be said to be the ultimate weapon and if your ship's drive keeps inertia in the loop then you must remember that
her ship will become a potential weapon that will dwarf the largest fusion bombs and even dinosaur killer asteroids. It will also mean what ever her ship
strikes, even a invisibly small grain of dust will be creating forces beyond the levels of most atomic weapons.
There are solutions and designs of FTL that side step the issues with a "handwave" and these work even more so for a "magic" universe like
Sailor Moon.
Take for instance the jump drive mentioned above for nBSG had the writer simply made it impossible for the show's jump
drive to jump within a set distance of a magnetic field above a certain intensity then he wouldn't have had the "Stupidities" and plot holes that
started to shine forth in the first 30 minutes of the series. Gravity or curvature of space is another possible limiting device, but it has less flexable than
using the idea of magnetic fields.(Cutting or disrupting the gravity of a planet would be a even more powerful weapon, why bother with jumping fire crackers
into the planet when all you have to do is point a gravity nullifier at the world and watch it shed continents into deep space.)
As I said just a couple of nitpicks, I'm still reading this which is saying something for a pure Sailor Moon fanfic, I really don't like sailor moon.
Anyway I hope I helped and didn't hinder
howard melton
God bless