No real constructive commentary here, just random assortment of praise. =)
I've just gotten caught up on what you've been doing here, and...really, this is excellent. A part of me feels like I'm 12 again and rolling dice over record sheets...
You've done a great job at bringing the Star Adders to life in the narrative. I assume they've probably been featured extensively in some source material or whatever, but it's not material I'm familiar with. Annnd...I've always thought the whole ProtoMech thing was bloody stupid, but no, you've made that work too. It's that kind of deft hand with the canon material, sprinked with just enough creative original interpretation...that I think really makes this rock.
The meta-conceit's something like that too. We all know the story of the canon invasion. This is a different - and yet perfectly logical - take on its basic points and tenets. The original invasion plan being lacking, the withdrawal in the middle of the whole shindig to hold an election (well, granted, that much probably fit the Warder political agenda, but ehh), all the bits and pieces like that.
Well played, sir.
-- Acyl
I've just gotten caught up on what you've been doing here, and...really, this is excellent. A part of me feels like I'm 12 again and rolling dice over record sheets...
You've done a great job at bringing the Star Adders to life in the narrative. I assume they've probably been featured extensively in some source material or whatever, but it's not material I'm familiar with. Annnd...I've always thought the whole ProtoMech thing was bloody stupid, but no, you've made that work too. It's that kind of deft hand with the canon material, sprinked with just enough creative original interpretation...that I think really makes this rock.
The meta-conceit's something like that too. We all know the story of the canon invasion. This is a different - and yet perfectly logical - take on its basic points and tenets. The original invasion plan being lacking, the withdrawal in the middle of the whole shindig to hold an election (well, granted, that much probably fit the Warder political agenda, but ehh), all the bits and pieces like that.
Well played, sir.
-- Acyl