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Writing Advice Needed: The Briefing
 
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If you need an example, try that scene from Independence Day where the fighter pilots are gathered for the briefing for the first, ill-fated counter attack...
"You scared, man?"
"Nah. ... Hold me!"
"Get off!"
"Gentlemen, is there a problem?"
"Ah, nah sir. Just a little eager to get up there and whoop ET's ass!"
"You'll get your chance, son."
Bits and pieces like that to break things up are priceless, especially if you can pull it off without making it seem over-the-top or out of character. Another way of doing it, if it's a short breifing, is something I did on a project with a friend.  They've got a trashed apartment on the verge of being condemed to clean up, and Zeke is going ofer the broad strokes, after which his best buddy decides to get funny wiht him...
"Any questions?" asked Zeke.
Tannim raised his hand.  "What does yellow smell like?"
"Yellow would be that stuff thats been left in the toilets for too long," said Zeke without missing a beat.  "Don't worry, I've got a way to deal with that."
"Throwing them out?" wondered Tannim, grimacing at the thought.
"Only the ones that are too far gone.  I'll get a garden hose to clear out the ones without working water."
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Writing Advice Needed: The Briefing - by CattyNebulart - 02-25-2009, 08:35 PM
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