Dude. You know that if you put this through a word processor, like MS Word, Abiword, or even Open Office, then copy-paste the text over into Yuku's posting
form, it'll carry over the indents. It also makes it hella easier to edit this beast down. I honestly had to stop reading when I saw that you left in the
time-stamps. I only do that sort of thing when I'm pointing out the highlights of commentary over a collaborative project.
The fact that these timestamps do exist intrigues me. Are you working on this with the help of a friend? If so, then let me point you in the direction of
several useful tools.
If the both of you use MS Word, then CoWord would probably be the way to go. It is an add-on app that turns MS Word
into a real-time collaborative word processor. However, it requires some understanding of how a server works, as you gotta set up one computer to act as the
host machine.
Another alternative that requires a little less fuss is Abiword. Abiword is another MS Word clone that has recently
added integrated real-time collaboration. Best of all, it is available for all platforms: Windows, Mac, and Linux.
Finally, if you want a minimum of screwing around and don't mind your stuff being in plain-text format, there is Etherpad. Etherpad is an entirely web-based text editor whose sole purpose is to provide a venue for real-time collaboration.
Disadvantage, though, is that it requires a very low-lag connection for the best performance. Otherwise you keep on getting dumped from their synchronization
server.
As for the story istelf, it's a very interesting idea. I'd read more into it, but it becomes a chore when I have to guess who's doing the talking.
Try opening up a book, preferably a good one (I recomend Diane Duane or Mercedes Lackey - they're awesome authors), and try to emulate how the dialogue is
presented.
form, it'll carry over the indents. It also makes it hella easier to edit this beast down. I honestly had to stop reading when I saw that you left in the
time-stamps. I only do that sort of thing when I'm pointing out the highlights of commentary over a collaborative project.
The fact that these timestamps do exist intrigues me. Are you working on this with the help of a friend? If so, then let me point you in the direction of
several useful tools.
If the both of you use MS Word, then CoWord would probably be the way to go. It is an add-on app that turns MS Word
into a real-time collaborative word processor. However, it requires some understanding of how a server works, as you gotta set up one computer to act as the
host machine.
Another alternative that requires a little less fuss is Abiword. Abiword is another MS Word clone that has recently
added integrated real-time collaboration. Best of all, it is available for all platforms: Windows, Mac, and Linux.
Finally, if you want a minimum of screwing around and don't mind your stuff being in plain-text format, there is Etherpad. Etherpad is an entirely web-based text editor whose sole purpose is to provide a venue for real-time collaboration.
Disadvantage, though, is that it requires a very low-lag connection for the best performance. Otherwise you keep on getting dumped from their synchronization
server.
As for the story istelf, it's a very interesting idea. I'd read more into it, but it becomes a chore when I have to guess who's doing the talking.
Try opening up a book, preferably a good one (I recomend Diane Duane or Mercedes Lackey - they're awesome authors), and try to emulate how the dialogue is
presented.