I guess there didn't seem to be much to it aside from "guy hangs around with the canon characters, scores with Nabiki, and is right about stuff." Any of the other stuff, like the hints at something bigger going on with the insertion itself, or the tattoo, seemed clumsily tacked on. More than anything, I suppose I just found it dull. Mediocre. Plus too much "I'm not a Mary Sue, really!"
The Nabiki bit also gave me an eyeball roll or two, partly because Twisted Path already did it, partly because she's an arse in canon, partly because I suspected she was picked out of mere availability rather than actual suitability.
And a strong second to Destiny's Child, which also has a FanFiction.Net version. That was where I read it, which meant that the ending of chapter 6 came as more of a surprise than it might have if I'd seen the art before.
Pronounced "shy guy."
The Nabiki bit also gave me an eyeball roll or two, partly because Twisted Path already did it, partly because she's an arse in canon, partly because I suspected she was picked out of mere availability rather than actual suitability.
And a strong second to Destiny's Child, which also has a FanFiction.Net version. That was where I read it, which meant that the ending of chapter 6 came as more of a surprise than it might have if I'd seen the art before.
Pronounced "shy guy."