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#32
11-08-2009, 11:53 PM
I spotted a couple typos,

Suki was waiting at the cock when the canoe arrived.

I don't know if Suki was supposed to be waiting at 'the rock' or 'the dock', but what you have currently is definatly wrong. 8P

When that didn't work, he opened his mouth and blew, trying to dislodge her but he had to stop when she refused and the pulling on his sensitive nose

looks like you're missing the end of the sentence.
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Damascus (A:TLA) - by drakensis - 11-01-2009, 10:22 PM
Wo-ho!! - by Jonas - 11-02-2009, 12:22 AM
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