OK. So, if I'm understanding what you are saying correctly, she thinks of herself as too old to be fantasizing about marriage, but too young to be thinking about it seriously?
Maybe to make that a bit clearer, you could change the first "too young" bit to something along the lines of "too old for such silly romantic nonsense", and keep the second "too young" bit, which is a line or two down, as is? The second one comes after her thinking about the idea of marriage a bit more seriously, so it seems more appropriate there than right after her complaining about having girlish fantasies.
There is something about this paragraph that is just bugging me, and I can't quite pin it down. Maybe its the repetition of the phrase "too young for that sort of thing"? Sorry I can't be more specific. It just feels slightly off somehow.
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Stand between the Silver Crystal and the Golden Sea.
"Youngsters these days just have no appreciation for the magnificence of the legendary cucumber." --Krityan Elder, Tales of Vesperia.
Maybe to make that a bit clearer, you could change the first "too young" bit to something along the lines of "too old for such silly romantic nonsense", and keep the second "too young" bit, which is a line or two down, as is? The second one comes after her thinking about the idea of marriage a bit more seriously, so it seems more appropriate there than right after her complaining about having girlish fantasies.
There is something about this paragraph that is just bugging me, and I can't quite pin it down. Maybe its the repetition of the phrase "too young for that sort of thing"? Sorry I can't be more specific. It just feels slightly off somehow.
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Stand between the Silver Crystal and the Golden Sea.
"Youngsters these days just have no appreciation for the magnificence of the legendary cucumber." --Krityan Elder, Tales of Vesperia.