So I've been doing this Self Insert for the last 4 years, off and on... kind of inspired by IWATD, but trying to be different and plow its own furrow. Writing style changes a bit as it goes on but, if you've never heard of it, it's available here. That's up to part 10 done.
Anyway,
I've got part 11 finished, but it's short a prereader... I was kind of hoping that somebody here might be familiar enough with the fic, and would have time to spare to give it a quick once over. I tried it myself, however as people may know, I'm not the best when it comes to the intricacies of the English language (to put it mildly). My old prereader left the fandom about a year ago...and it kinda shows.
Plotwise... I think Noriko might whine a little too much... but one of the criticisms previously was that she didn't whine enough. It's quite hard to find a medium on that. She also repeats herself a bit.
Is anybody willing to take a look on this? It's about 73 pages of .odt
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Anyway,
I've got part 11 finished, but it's short a prereader... I was kind of hoping that somebody here might be familiar enough with the fic, and would have time to spare to give it a quick once over. I tried it myself, however as people may know, I'm not the best when it comes to the intricacies of the English language (to put it mildly). My old prereader left the fandom about a year ago...and it kinda shows.
Plotwise... I think Noriko might whine a little too much... but one of the criticisms previously was that she didn't whine enough. It's quite hard to find a medium on that. She also repeats herself a bit.
Is anybody willing to take a look on this? It's about 73 pages of .odt
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--m(^0^)m-- Wot, no sig?