Interesting, though it feels like a trailer more than anything else.
May I suggest making the line "Once more, we've danced with the devil in the pale moonlight, and we taught that bastard how to tango." its own paragraph? I think it would have added impact and weight that way, rather than at the end of a long one. Maybe stick it between the final two stanzas of the song.
May I suggest making the line "Once more, we've danced with the devil in the pale moonlight, and we taught that bastard how to tango." its own paragraph? I think it would have added impact and weight that way, rather than at the end of a long one. Maybe stick it between the final two stanzas of the song.