Jorlem Wrote:Ah, sorry. I think that part of the problem I had with the power levels might have been because I'm seeing this in a planning forum, not in the story itself. That is, I'm seeing what you plan as the end result, and not the progression you intend to get there. Also, when I read the word 'Avatar', a part of me makes a sort of mental jump to Aang's avatar state, which I shouldn't be doing. I had enjoyed the chapters that you had written previously, and thought the power levels shown in story were ok, from what I recall. It was what was discussed in the comments that rang a few of my alarm bells IIRC.It's okay. Every now and then we all wind up doing something like that.
Also, if Zeke is a Whispered, then I can see that being a decent source of conflict with the UEC once it is revealed. Something along the lines of "If you hadn't been born a Whispered, I would have been the one that Raven would have picked!" Heck, this could be what drives him all the way to fully joining with Amalgam.
Anyway, sorry.
Whispered status helping to provoke a bad reaction? Not a bad idea. Just have to be careful about running afoul of that cheesy 'I'll Show Them All!' trope - it's good in a comedy, but otherwise iffy.
Quote:paladindythe wrote:Maybe. That or I can do an AU version kinda like how that one guy has two versions of his Naruto fic, A Mother's Love. Three, actually, if you count A Father's Love as well. Too bad he's never finished the Alt versions and probably never will. Anywho, that sort of setup is one I've been a fan of, too - where you have periods of relative normalcy that are jarred by moments of Refuge in Audacity and Beyond the Impossible.
You should probably keep that around as an omake. I'm imagining everyone super-deformed and stuff.