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Sigh...
 
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blackaeronaut,
I certainly intended no such hints.
My silence was due to three factors.
1.  For the past week and a half or so, I have been fried more or less to the point of being non-verbal.
2.  I read fast and write very slowly.  It is fairly common for me to see something, get partway into a response, and be unable to complete it in a timely fashion.  Just the recent lengthy responses in this forum that I've partway thought out and have yet to type out alone...  I've neglected finding the correct words in favor of getting this out quicker.
3.  I was unable, at the time, to come up with enough meat in my reaction to be worth troubling you.
Going off memory, and without anything to refer to, I can only come up with the following shoddy effort.
Internal family troubles can certainly do what you have them doing.  Yes, they are often used, but this is because they can work for this.
My memories of the earlier writings on this project were so patchy that I only had a vague notion of what this sketch meant.  How this sketch would be executed into the rest of the work could potentially make so much a difference that I have trouble drawing any firm conclusions.  Which I guess I should have translated into 'seems workable'.
I haven't the background on tribal law to say much about the legalities of the punishment of the killing.  I could ramble, but I don't think I know anything that you can't find out more easily from other sources if it matters to you.  I have some musing about the legalities of filicide under Roman Law*, but that isn't relevant.  Also:  If Chutzpah is a Patricide/Matricide crying mercy on account of being an orphan, what do you call crying leniency on account of needing to care for the Grandson whose parents one murdered?
*Knowledge of the Roman legal code is incomplete, and my background is weak, but they had some pretty vile personal habits.
Hidden Leaf makes me think of Naruto.
Does Teletha have any mystic training?
From what I recall of what was posted of the well developed sections of the story, this sketch includes two members of that subsection of the cast.  The additional background details discussed were not, I think, hugely important to the portions I remember reading.  There was in this sketch at least one character clearly being prepped for later uses, and two other possibles.  (I have a vague idea that I'd maybe forgotten the cousin rival being introduced.  If I have, maybe this sketch slots in better with knowledge of that.)  Basically, the level of detail seems funny, and I had a bit of trouble finding out the intent of the post.  Which maybe I should have translated to 'please expand'/'please clarify about what exactly you are trying to express'/'for this type of outline, shouldn't you say what entity the cousin-rival shacked up with'/'RomanFanboy is silly and incoherent'.
Anything further that I could say might count as trying to impose my tastes on your writing project.  (I have a peculiar pet interpretation of FMP's worldbuilding.)  I may have already gone overboard as it is.
Whatever environment you find congenial to complete the project in, I do hope that if you work elsewhere, you will make us aware of new sections as they are brought to a fuller state.
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Sigh... - by Black Aeronaut - 06-29-2012, 04:57 AM
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