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Fanfic: An Astral Drop in Heatherfield
 
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I was thinking of pretending to be so ignorant of geography that I thought the other side of the national border was water rather than land. (Mare incognitum) Sometimes I'll grab the possibility I think most likely to make someone squirm. Or laugh at me.

Sounds almost like she has chronic backstabbing disorder.

I really should have a good, appropriate, Jadeite reference for here.

More seriously, she sounds markedly human. This sounds like a situation where she's a bit in over her head, and making long term decisions based on short term things. Like she doesn't start with enough of a center and a foundation for what she is trying to do, and hasn't really developed her foresight and long term thinking. In other words, like many other young people involved in politics.

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You know, I really don't know how to evaluate this. I mean, they are taking risks that I probably wouldn't. But then, I am really risk averse, and probably too risk averse for this sort of work. Also, at least one of them is a magical girl, and genre convention is that those are often implicitly or explicitly really good at reading people. I tend to rate my ability at that as low.

I've just realized that x of Kandrakar kind of fits standard nomenclature for bad guy's item of evil power.

I'm kind of confused by a bit near the end. The shelf is concealing the entrance to a tunnel, right? Can't quite find the words, but when I try to integrate the mental images from the descriptions in different parts of the pieces, I get mismatches. Like 'Why don't they fall down the stairs?' 'Okay, exactly what shape and size hole are we talking about' Maybe I'll scrape together some more sense to figure out my thoughts after I sleep.

"This is where Cedric invited her to, the first time they met. If there's anywhere I can find a way too her, it'll start here."

way to her

She was right, I admitted, twenty minutes later was we looked at the store front of the apparently closed Ye Olde Bookstore. This was not somewhere that I wanted to come back to.

as we looked

I still say that the name alone sounds suspect, unless it is written with a thorn.

Cornelia swayed slightly and pressed one hand againt her forehead. "Caleb?"

Against.

She ignored me. "If you have changed, maybe Elyon has changed too," I heard her say as I scrambled after them. Beneath the hole was a broad, dark spiral staircase. I had had no idea that there were tunnels like this under Heatherfield. Or was this portal.

Or was this a portal? maybe

With a sigh, the man turned and gestured the direction of travel. "Well... we can hope." I hastened my steps to catch up and the three of us began to walk side by side towards the portal that would take us to the strange world of Metamoor. "Who knows? Maybe Elyon really has changed..."

I see what you did here. I guess the whole part of the expedition thing is also a statement of hope.
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