I think I looked at it once before, but if my reaction to looking at the first chapter this time is any indication, I probably dropped it like a hot potato on the grounds of being painfully badly written.
Not sure I could point to what made me feel that way, although it's almost certainly purely cosmetic (as in, you could probably use exactly the same events and just phrase them differently, and have it be just fine), but the impression is immediate and strong.
Not sure I could point to what made me feel that way, although it's almost certainly purely cosmetic (as in, you could probably use exactly the same events and just phrase them differently, and have it be just fine), but the impression is immediate and strong.