Feel free to include that or any of my other replies as omake when you get around to posting this somewhere else, by the way.
As for the transformation sequence, sometimes a big stretch of descrptive text is what it takes to tell the story. Just make sure to break it up into paragraphs as the actions change so it's not a huge wall-o-text and edit ruthlessly for even a single word that's not neccessary to describe the scene you want the reader to visualise, to make it no longer than it has to be.
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"Anko, what you do in your free time is your own choice. Use it wisely. And if you do not use it wisely, make sure you thoroughly enjoy whatever unwise thing you are doing." - HymnOfRagnorok as Orochimaru at SpaceBattles
woot Med. Eng., verb, 1st & 3rd pers. prsnt. sg. know, knows
As for the transformation sequence, sometimes a big stretch of descrptive text is what it takes to tell the story. Just make sure to break it up into paragraphs as the actions change so it's not a huge wall-o-text and edit ruthlessly for even a single word that's not neccessary to describe the scene you want the reader to visualise, to make it no longer than it has to be.
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"Anko, what you do in your free time is your own choice. Use it wisely. And if you do not use it wisely, make sure you thoroughly enjoy whatever unwise thing you are doing." - HymnOfRagnorok as Orochimaru at SpaceBattles
woot Med. Eng., verb, 1st & 3rd pers. prsnt. sg. know, knows