Good character insights and character interaction. However, it feels like these people are pulling Garrick into the inner circle and upper echelons a little too quickly. He pops up totally at random, they know nothing about him, and right away he's part of the household, handed a seed that will grow up into a ship that can one-shot plannets, and by extension adopted into the Royal family.
These people are friendly and accomodating, but again this seems to be going a lttle fast.
On other subjects, I'm a fan of the manga as well as the cartoons and would like to see Minagi and other elements in your story.
On a third subject, "shonen" could work but it doesn't work as well as shojou, specifically because its Noboyuki's shojou manga collection that Sasami and the other girls read.
Lastly, and this may be completely misinformed and even unintentionally offensive on my part, but what little I know of Mormon theology leaves me with the impression that it's more open to the idea of having multiple creators of multiple creations than most other Judeo-Christian branches. The whole, "What man is, God once was. What God is, man may become," point indicates that there was a creation in place before this one and there are other creators with their own domains.
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No, I don't believe the world has gone mad. In order for it to go mad it would need to have been sane at some point.
These people are friendly and accomodating, but again this seems to be going a lttle fast.
On other subjects, I'm a fan of the manga as well as the cartoons and would like to see Minagi and other elements in your story.
On a third subject, "shonen" could work but it doesn't work as well as shojou, specifically because its Noboyuki's shojou manga collection that Sasami and the other girls read.
Lastly, and this may be completely misinformed and even unintentionally offensive on my part, but what little I know of Mormon theology leaves me with the impression that it's more open to the idea of having multiple creators of multiple creations than most other Judeo-Christian branches. The whole, "What man is, God once was. What God is, man may become," point indicates that there was a creation in place before this one and there are other creators with their own domains.
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No, I don't believe the world has gone mad. In order for it to go mad it would need to have been sane at some point.