And that's just adorable. Well done, well done -- the only nit I have to pick is:
-- Bob
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Then the horns kicked in...
...and my shoes began to squeak.
Quote:Really, all she had was a minor bit-roll.You mean "bit role" here. "minor bit role" is a tad redundant, as a bit role is by definition a minor role, but it's in dialogue and people causally make mistakes like that all the time when talking. If it were in narration I'd flag it as needing correction.
-- Bob
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Then the horns kicked in...
...and my shoes began to squeak.