Ouch. Dangerous situation you're in, there. I'm just waiting for somebody to wander into the whole situation, catch wind of what little Yuki is doing, and go "Dude, WHAT THE HELL IS WRONG WITH YOU?!" I do like the way you're writing her- agitating for something that she doesn't entirely understand. It's got the (rather loud) ring of truth to it.
Also, training the girl up? Doubly dangerous. On the one hand, she'll eventually be able to take care of herself. On the other, you're going to be dealing with bouts of 'I'm good enough for this!', the more-scrupulous enemies out there will class her as a fighter (instead of the potential hostage/noncombatant she was), and you're exposing her (heh) to more muscle and sweat time. Not the best way to drive her off, or keep her at arm's length, that last one.
I find I do my best writing under a few different conditions. If I'm feeling something strongly, I can channel that into the narrative. If the plot grabs me, it'll write itself through me better than I could write it myself. Finally, if I'm personally familiar with what I'm writing, it comes easily. Emotion, experience, and (narrative in)evitability?
My Unitarian Jihad Name is: Brother Atom Bomb of Courteous Debate. Get yours.
I've been writing a bit.
Also, training the girl up? Doubly dangerous. On the one hand, she'll eventually be able to take care of herself. On the other, you're going to be dealing with bouts of 'I'm good enough for this!', the more-scrupulous enemies out there will class her as a fighter (instead of the potential hostage/noncombatant she was), and you're exposing her (heh) to more muscle and sweat time. Not the best way to drive her off, or keep her at arm's length, that last one.
I find I do my best writing under a few different conditions. If I'm feeling something strongly, I can channel that into the narrative. If the plot grabs me, it'll write itself through me better than I could write it myself. Finally, if I'm personally familiar with what I'm writing, it comes easily. Emotion, experience, and (narrative in)evitability?
My Unitarian Jihad Name is: Brother Atom Bomb of Courteous Debate. Get yours.
I've been writing a bit.