No, he's already quite thoroughly doomed. Doomed to a doomy doom, with sprinkles of extra doom. And lolis.
I agree that there's no need to go over Garrik's story again at this point, too, but you could do with adding a line of actual dialogue before narrating that, 'I scowled down etc. "Let me tell you a story..."' or the like.
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"Anko, what you do in your free time is your own choice. Use it wisely. And if you do not use it wisely, make sure you thoroughly enjoy whatever unwise thing you are doing." - HymnOfRagnorok as Orochimaru at SpaceBattles
woot Med. Eng., verb, 1st & 3rd pers. prsnt. sg. know, knows
I agree that there's no need to go over Garrik's story again at this point, too, but you could do with adding a line of actual dialogue before narrating that, 'I scowled down etc. "Let me tell you a story..."' or the like.
--
"Anko, what you do in your free time is your own choice. Use it wisely. And if you do not use it wisely, make sure you thoroughly enjoy whatever unwise thing you are doing." - HymnOfRagnorok as Orochimaru at SpaceBattles
woot Med. Eng., verb, 1st & 3rd pers. prsnt. sg. know, knows