[RFC][SI][Multi-Xover] Being You is (Even More) Suffering

[Bluemage]

Misaki was nearly on the verge of tears

Needs a period.
A couple of lines after that, you Tom Swift twice in a row.  Might consider changing it.
As for the content... well, I think you've successfully created a grade-A harem chase scene.  You've also defused a comedic misunderstanding... which might be your problem.  The Law of Conservation of Harem Comedy mandated that that comedy must've gone somewhere... and it went into a crowd of fangirls.
Also the romance.  Expect that to up your misunderstanding quota in the future.

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