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Update... of a sort

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02-28-2009, 01:11 AM

A strange rather retro update notification here, but the first story in the Compelled Series, Compelled to Play Again has just been renovated two years on. I've cleaned
up some dialogue, corrected some errors and generally made the text a little less clunky.

No changes to the actual storyline but it is a few thousand words longer than it was a week ago and I think it's a somewhat better read now. I'm hoping
to get some positive response from the readership and if it seems worth it I'm going to move on and fix the second story in the series too.

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Update - by Hotpoint - 02-22-2009, 07:56 PM

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Update... of a sort - by Hotpoint - 02-28-2009, 01:11 AM

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Crossing barriers ch 25 - by ariel silverstorm - 03-07-2009, 02:52 PM

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Update - by Hotpoint - 03-09-2009, 12:04 AM

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part 2 of chapter 3 of Fragmentation - by hmelton - 03-14-2009, 07:34 AM

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