(01-03-2018, 08:16 PM)Matrix Dragon Wrote:(01-02-2018, 12:37 AM)Morganite Wrote:(12-18-2017, 05:22 PM)Matrix Dragon Wrote: I get the feeling it may not show up at SB. Eleventh was pretty damn bitter and angry before he got that last threadlock. He might well post the sequel elsewhere. As for this chapter, eh, it's better than the last few, but still feels very 'going through the motions' compared to earlier parts.
I can't really blame him. There seemed to be a lot of stuff there that crossed the line from "Here's how you can improve your story" to "Here's how you can turn your story from the story you want to tell into the story I want", which gets old fast.
Though after reading some of the complaints about the final (non-epilogue) chapter and then rereading it, I'm finding I appreciate it more than I did the first time around. So, uh... good job?
-Morgan.
While for me, it remains very much tripping over at the finish line. Oh well, I've spent money on worse finishes.
Something like that. I mean, I personally get what 11M was trying to do, just like I got what Gryphon was trying to do with the original version of "The Vulcan Heart"; it's just that (again like Gryph) he didn't quite stick the landing first time, and a lot of commenters, in their vehemence to point this out to him, said more than they meant from the sheer force of actually meaning it.