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[OOC][PLOT] The Return of Planning for Arc 1 - Arrivals
RE: [OOC][PLOT] The Return of Planning for Arc 1 - Arrivals
(08-27-2018, 11:36 PM)Labster Wrote: I added a few related scenes to the Halloween party.  Rob, you definitely need to read and perhaps revise, as I'm using your characters -- one in particular -- quite a lot and adding characterization.  I don't feel bad about this at all, as a random choice about Japanese mythology turned into being the absolute perfect choice once I asked Osaka.

I replaced one period with an exclamation mark in the one-on-one scene. Other than that, I think the scene is good.

I've also added one reaction to the news, in the follow-up scene.

(08-27-2018, 11:36 PM)Labster Wrote: On rereading other people's portions of the party, I may not be clear how transportation is working.  Are we taking normal human transit, or portals, or what?  Are we staying overnight, a couple days, or just shuffling off home through portals?

Halloween 2016 was a Monday, and I've already established that some of the girls were in Montreal the previous weekend. Portals in and out, and at least Rob's household is only staying one night - the girls have classes Tuesday morning.
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Rob Kelk

Sticks and stones can break your bones,
But words can break your heart.
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RE: [OOC][PLOT] The Return of Planning for Arc 1 - Arrivals - by robkelk - 08-28-2018, 07:04 AM

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