RE: [RFC] Going Native. (With Edits)
12-13-2019, 04:57 AM (This post was last modified: 12-13-2019, 05:00 AM by Star Ranger4.)
12-13-2019, 04:57 AM (This post was last modified: 12-13-2019, 05:00 AM by Star Ranger4.)
Okay... so, you've done the improbable, Gotten me to dig into a six year old completed fic.
And having done so, I think I've gotten to the point the 'Wormverse-You' seems to be most concerned about, the attack by Leviathan on Brockton Bay, in specific the carnage when the shelter is breached. At the moment I am assuming that Mammy and Ouldfella are among the casualties the first time you experience this (as compared to just reading about it)? That aside from Worm-you remembering your life here in this (ie the one where you are just writing about all this, not living through it) universe, the worm you also remembers loosing a large number of loved.... or cared for alot ones... the 'first' time through, before worm-you's powers 'officially' trigger?
Either way, I am seeing quite a few grammar errors I am assuming come from the difference between Gaelic, the queen's english, and Amurican. (yes, a phonetic misspelling to get the accent across). Will be going back and doing a line by line to help isolate them regardless of if you decide they needed fixing or not.
Oh, and I find an Irishman following the Tao of the Scotsman (Scotty) kind of hilarious in its own right.
And having done so, I think I've gotten to the point the 'Wormverse-You' seems to be most concerned about, the attack by Leviathan on Brockton Bay, in specific the carnage when the shelter is breached. At the moment I am assuming that Mammy and Ouldfella are among the casualties the first time you experience this (as compared to just reading about it)? That aside from Worm-you remembering your life here in this (ie the one where you are just writing about all this, not living through it) universe, the worm you also remembers loosing a large number of loved.... or cared for alot ones... the 'first' time through, before worm-you's powers 'officially' trigger?
Either way, I am seeing quite a few grammar errors I am assuming come from the difference between Gaelic, the queen's english, and Amurican. (yes, a phonetic misspelling to get the accent across). Will be going back and doing a line by line to help isolate them regardless of if you decide they needed fixing or not.
Oh, and I find an Irishman following the Tao of the Scotsman (Scotty) kind of hilarious in its own right.
Hear that thunder rolling till it seems to rock the sky?
Thats' every ship in Grayson's Navy taking up the cry!
NO QUARTER!
No Quarter by Echo's Children
Thats' every ship in Grayson's Navy taking up the cry!
NO QUARTER!
No Quarter by Echo's Children