So, um, while I rewrote Kestrel’s scene a little bit to put it in third person, I noticed today that Bob’s intro scene is also in first person. And I guess I don’t really care? For some reason Kestrel being in first person was more jarring while Bob’s isn’t. Possibly it’s tone and writing quality, and the structure slowly eases into action. But also, Bob will likely write more things and Kestrel is likely not to, and first person would create more of an expectation of a continuing story.
Kestrel’s also needed help because he never named himself in the story too, I guess. Fine in some contexts, but not in a compilation with this many characters.
Kestrel’s also needed help because he never named himself in the story too, I guess. Fine in some contexts, but not in a compilation with this many characters.
"Kitto daijoubu da yo." - Sakura Kinomoto