As mentioned before in this very thread, I love this work, as can be seen by the fact that I post a lot here.
But I think the biggest trap, the biggest danger of it all is this: there's very little conflict.
A quick look through the "Spell Songbook" shows that Doug can handle anything thrown at him pretty well. You'd need Galactus-level power to do anything really bad to him, and there's nobody like that in either BGC or the future chapters (with the exception of the Norns, only they're goddesses and thus don't count).
The only conflicts here are emotional, and that's not very dramatic. Drama is built on conflict, and frankly there doesn't seem to be much that Doug can't use his superpowers for and beat pretty handily.
I mean, he took out the Knight Sabers pretty easily. The only thing he has to worry about is not being able to save every "innocent bystander" around, and even then he can call up a handy god and try to get them to live again.
Without conflict, without there being an actual threat to Doug, there's not going to be much interest in reading this beyond the "hey, Doug's in Cowboy Bebop. Look at how quick he beat Spike up, heh heh."
-murmur the fallen
say, how fast COULD doug beat spike spiegel up . . .
But I think the biggest trap, the biggest danger of it all is this: there's very little conflict.
A quick look through the "Spell Songbook" shows that Doug can handle anything thrown at him pretty well. You'd need Galactus-level power to do anything really bad to him, and there's nobody like that in either BGC or the future chapters (with the exception of the Norns, only they're goddesses and thus don't count).
The only conflicts here are emotional, and that's not very dramatic. Drama is built on conflict, and frankly there doesn't seem to be much that Doug can't use his superpowers for and beat pretty handily.
I mean, he took out the Knight Sabers pretty easily. The only thing he has to worry about is not being able to save every "innocent bystander" around, and even then he can call up a handy god and try to get them to live again.
Without conflict, without there being an actual threat to Doug, there's not going to be much interest in reading this beyond the "hey, Doug's in Cowboy Bebop. Look at how quick he beat Spike up, heh heh."
-murmur the fallen
say, how fast COULD doug beat spike spiegel up . . .