Wonderful, just wonderful. I sat down and reread the entire story first though so I defently can say your doing an exelent job. I was wondering about Lisa's reactions to the two times she has had Doug use his metagift on her. Is her reaction normal or are you planning somthing down the line, like that one line that doug said about power calling to power?
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Chapter 7
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The power stumbled in its whispering song, as if puzzled by her
thoughts. It almost dissolved into cacophony, but rallied itself
and, if anything, increased in intensity. Here, it said to her,
here is how to do it. You are the first to ask.
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Chapter 7
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But I was less troubled by her fashion sense than by where the hell that damned outfit had come from. "Invisible Touch" was only supposed to give her simple TK -- a defensive shield and a ranged attack. Enough to keep her alive if anything went after her. That's the way it had always worked before. It had never done anything like this.
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Chapter 12
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One other major concern preyed upon her mind: in the presence of the Warriors, the memories from Doug's homeworld were growing more and more intrusive. Worse, they seemed to be becoming an increasingly seamless part of her own memories, frightening in the level of detail available to her most casual consultation.
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Chapter 12
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Hexe then leaned down, and as she had for Doug, brushed her lips across the girl's forehead. "My blessing upon you, too, girl." A disturbing edge seemed to slide into the goddess' smile.
"You'll need it."
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Oh hte relivent Quotes:
Chapter 7
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The power stumbled in its whispering song, as if puzzled by her
thoughts. It almost dissolved into cacophony, but rallied itself
and, if anything, increased in intensity. Here, it said to her,
here is how to do it. You are the first to ask.
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Chapter 7
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But I was less troubled by her fashion sense than by where the hell that damned outfit had come from. "Invisible Touch" was only supposed to give her simple TK -- a defensive shield and a ranged attack. Enough to keep her alive if anything went after her. That's the way it had always worked before. It had never done anything like this.
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Chapter 12
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One other major concern preyed upon her mind: in the presence of the Warriors, the memories from Doug's homeworld were growing more and more intrusive. Worse, they seemed to be becoming an increasingly seamless part of her own memories, frightening in the level of detail available to her most casual consultation.
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Chapter 12
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Hexe then leaned down, and as she had for Doug, brushed her lips across the girl's forehead. "My blessing upon you, too, girl." A disturbing edge seemed to slide into the goddess' smile.
"You'll need it."
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