Norway took the ellipsis right out of my ... well, beat me to typing it, assuming I'd have thought to phrase it that way.
When I saw the reference to the fighters being "four foot something" tall, and then the magic circle manifested, I wondered if this was a Nanoha story -- but the major characters from one of those probably wouldn't be considered "crunchies," and anyway, that fish-thing doesn't match with anything I've ever heard about from the Nanoha-'verse. I am ... bewildered.
I'm a little uncertain about Doug introducing himself directly to the reader in this one. It doesn't feel quite in character, somehow (subject to Bob overruling me, of course).
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Big Brother is watching you. And damn, you are so bloody BORING.
When I saw the reference to the fighters being "four foot something" tall, and then the magic circle manifested, I wondered if this was a Nanoha story -- but the major characters from one of those probably wouldn't be considered "crunchies," and anyway, that fish-thing doesn't match with anything I've ever heard about from the Nanoha-'verse. I am ... bewildered.
I'm a little uncertain about Doug introducing himself directly to the reader in this one. It doesn't feel quite in character, somehow (subject to Bob overruling me, of course).
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Big Brother is watching you. And damn, you are so bloody BORING.