Say, Dartz. You're from Ireland, right? How much of the accent do you think Jet would maintain before coming back down for this investigation? I mention it because when you mention what the detective notices about Jet when she first sees and hears her, I was thinking that a mention of it would be appropriate, seeing as how, at that point, you are writing from the perspective of a local American cop. Maybe change it to something like -
Mind, I can't think of anyone I've ever met here who dislikes the Irish accent. (Lots of women here go crazy for 'em, in fact! Men too, come to think of it. ^_^) But it would be noticeable to an American, and cops are trained to notice details that stand out anyway.
Quote:"I'm saying... it doesn't come off," A voice with a mild Irish lilt, mildly annoyed, and gruffly feminine. "It's not armour, it's a part of me."
Mind, I can't think of anyone I've ever met here who dislikes the Irish accent. (Lots of women here go crazy for 'em, in fact! Men too, come to think of it. ^_^) But it would be noticeable to an American, and cops are trained to notice details that stand out anyway.