Quick notes:
If you're going to find a rogue planet, maybe you should move this off towards the edge of the Oort, or maybe a light year beyond that, instead of the Kuiper. Kuiper's still pretty close. Also, the above and this bit:
These two conflict, so pick an engine and stick with it.
Other than that, I like this. Mel's nicely bratty and Jim Cameron's easy enough to pick out. Though I wonder where Bill Paxton is - it's not a Cameron documentary without Bill Paxton.
(Yes, I did watch Ghosts of the Abyss too many times.)
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Quote:“When they’ve finished with the repairs on our number two engine.” Sullenberger said. “We’re already 8 hours behind schedule. We haven’t even left the Kuiper belt yet.”
If you're going to find a rogue planet, maybe you should move this off towards the edge of the Oort, or maybe a light year beyond that, instead of the Kuiper. Kuiper's still pretty close. Also, the above and this bit:
Quote:Engine three was down with a blown intermix coil.... it always did that... and one had been shut off to ease repairs. Two was still giving normal thrust quite happily.
These two conflict, so pick an engine and stick with it.
Other than that, I like this. Mel's nicely bratty and Jim Cameron's easy enough to pick out. Though I wonder where Bill Paxton is - it's not a Cameron documentary without Bill Paxton.
(Yes, I did watch Ghosts of the Abyss too many times.)
Mr. Fnord interdimensional man of mystery
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"I. Drink. Your. NERDRAGE!"