robkelk Wrote:Folks, I still have a file with all the snippets up to the thread-bump sorted into a story skeleton. I'll put this together.Great.
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Quote:What we really need are some more scenes of ground action - a scene that lets the Fen know exactly what the Boskos are after (either somebody overhears the initial orders given when they breach the perimeter and relays a recording to the Con staff, or the invaders make a direct announcement of some sort), followed by many scenes of civilian-evac and "fighting in the hallways", including Kara's death scene. A few scenes of space combat wouldn't be amiss, either.Have to look over the whole thing again, maybe I can think about another part.
Quote:Don't worry about them fitting (or not fitting) together. This is going to be a prime example of the fog of war; some disjointedness is acceptable.*grin*