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[Story][Season 2]The gas station (finished)
Ace Dreamer
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#28
08-31-2012, 07:31 PM
Nice story, reads more smoothly, I think.

"‘Full gravity, a large cafeteria with real food and hot shower? I have to gratulate the people on Earth who organized this mission when I get back’ he thought."

Should be 'congratulate'.
"I looked like Europe had been slacking off with their space tech for years"
Should be 'It looked like'.
 - only things I noticed on reading.
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[Story][Season 2]The gas station (finished) - by HRogge - 06-10-2012, 09:16 PM
[No subject] - by Ace Dreamer - 06-10-2012, 11:25 PM
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[No subject] - by Ace Dreamer - 08-31-2012, 07:31 PM
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