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[Story][Season 0] Consolidated Failure
 
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Timote Wrote:"I am the Dread Pirate Roberta!"  Seemed a bit over-done, thought Arthur.  "So, you are going to kill me?"  "Tell me why I should make an exception!"

I believe that should be 3 separate paragraphs.  You're supposed to start a new one whenever a different person speaks.
True.  But, I thought I'd see how it went a one paragraph, as it looked very sparse split into three or four.
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[Story][Season 0] Consolidated Failure - by Ace Dreamer - 07-30-2012, 12:08 AM
[No subject] - by Ace Dreamer - 07-30-2012, 12:12 AM
[Story][Season 0] Consolidated Failure (2nd draft) - by Ace Dreamer - 08-06-2012, 03:30 PM
[No subject] - by Ace Dreamer - 08-06-2012, 03:33 PM
[No subject] - by Norgarth - 08-07-2012, 12:36 AM
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