Doesn't seem particularly harsh at all. Just constructive.
Okay, on the world-building exposition. I'll try to either cut it back or adjust the rest to allow its removal entirely over the next couple of days. I'll repost this original version on the planning thread, though, as since I went to the trouble of writing it I'd like it to at least be preserved as unused apocryphal material.
As to Mars, that's kind of something I REAAALY need to stay as is. Considering the dozens of lightyears ISOT in CitD and the CONUS swap in TSiR - especially since in the latter both Infinity and Centrum, and at one point the Nanoha-TSAB, were involved - isn't a patchwork Mars actually kind of tame in comparison? Especially since its composed almost entirely of non-sapient flora and fauna? It's not even like the MTP are out of business entirely, as they not only still need to maintain the Xavier-class magnetosphere satellites, but also see to it that the transplanted patchwork becomes a self-sustaining biosphere (I'll tell you right now that a number of the animal species present do not have stable breeding populations).
As for Struve, he's not the type to get his hands dirty unless he has to. The events that revealed him for what he was to the other Seele Council members were the result of carelessness on the Boskonians' part. The magic books he picked out reflect this (I had planned on touching on this in a not-too-latter story post) his own self-protection and the necromancy book is for, as he would put it, 'preventative maintenance' - ie, now that he knows that there is a Very Bad Place theologically-wise, he is now determined to not pay it a prolonged visit.
As for magic battles happening on Counter-Earth, yes, some will. For the most part, however, I intend for Fen/'enemy' encounters to consist of good-old-fashioned, Fen-style slapstick and tomfoolery, interspersed with moments of dramatic import.
...Wow, I used some fancy terms in that last paragraph.
Okay, on the world-building exposition. I'll try to either cut it back or adjust the rest to allow its removal entirely over the next couple of days. I'll repost this original version on the planning thread, though, as since I went to the trouble of writing it I'd like it to at least be preserved as unused apocryphal material.
As to Mars, that's kind of something I REAAALY need to stay as is. Considering the dozens of lightyears ISOT in CitD and the CONUS swap in TSiR - especially since in the latter both Infinity and Centrum, and at one point the Nanoha-TSAB, were involved - isn't a patchwork Mars actually kind of tame in comparison? Especially since its composed almost entirely of non-sapient flora and fauna? It's not even like the MTP are out of business entirely, as they not only still need to maintain the Xavier-class magnetosphere satellites, but also see to it that the transplanted patchwork becomes a self-sustaining biosphere (I'll tell you right now that a number of the animal species present do not have stable breeding populations).
Quote:...Xanatos and Struve wizard-dueling across a radically transformed Mars...*blink blink* I never said Alex is a mage. He's not. He has about as much magical potential as the magic-cancelling Nth Metal he requested.
As for Struve, he's not the type to get his hands dirty unless he has to. The events that revealed him for what he was to the other Seele Council members were the result of carelessness on the Boskonians' part. The magic books he picked out reflect this (I had planned on touching on this in a not-too-latter story post) his own self-protection and the necromancy book is for, as he would put it, 'preventative maintenance' - ie, now that he knows that there is a Very Bad Place theologically-wise, he is now determined to not pay it a prolonged visit.
As for magic battles happening on Counter-Earth, yes, some will. For the most part, however, I intend for Fen/'enemy' encounters to consist of good-old-fashioned, Fen-style slapstick and tomfoolery, interspersed with moments of dramatic import.
...Wow, I used some fancy terms in that last paragraph.