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RFC Story: Needs, Wants and Desires
 
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Interesting....

An interesting progression. It might be better to group time periods together, to match the Needs, Wants, Desire motif, rather than split the date with two 2024 segments.... it might fit the title better.

Also maybe switch a different font for the Date/Time headings... they tend to get lost in the narrative

Otherwise, it's a fine story. Even if I can't pronounce Loviatar.
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RFC Story: Needs, Wants and Desires - by Rajvik - 07-21-2014, 12:41 AM
[No subject] - by Dartz - 07-21-2014, 02:56 AM
[No subject] - by robkelk - 07-21-2014, 02:01 PM
[No subject] - by Bob Schroeck - 07-21-2014, 03:26 PM
[No subject] - by Rajvik - 07-21-2014, 03:42 PM
[No subject] - by Cobalt Greywalker - 07-21-2014, 11:22 PM
[No subject] - by Rajvik - 07-22-2014, 12:28 AM
[No subject] - by robkelk - 07-22-2014, 01:31 AM
[No subject] - by Dartz - 07-22-2014, 01:56 AM
[No subject] - by robkelk - 07-22-2014, 02:52 AM
[No subject] - by Dartz - 07-22-2014, 03:08 AM
[No subject] - by Rajvik - 07-22-2014, 03:37 AM
[No subject] - by robkelk - 07-22-2014, 01:13 PM

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