*nods* Any idea why the dialogue wasn't smooth, or is it just a general feeling of clunkiness? =P
I'll probably have to take another pass at it, honestly. My own guesses on why the main mission dialogue might not work work:
1) Montague's text might be too heavy on the info dump.
2) It's pretty formal and stilted (Monty's a serious sort in the canon arc, but even so...)
3) Looking back, I think I just wrote this thing, I didn't read the dialogue out loud or anything.
Does that seem right? I can try improving it.
-- Acyl
I'll probably have to take another pass at it, honestly. My own guesses on why the main mission dialogue might not work work:
1) Montague's text might be too heavy on the info dump.
2) It's pretty formal and stilted (Monty's a serious sort in the canon arc, but even so...)
3) Looking back, I think I just wrote this thing, I didn't read the dialogue out loud or anything.
Does that seem right? I can try improving it.
-- Acyl